Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract Many consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive discomfort after just a few weeks of use Among Greenhorne residents the consumption o

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Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract. Many consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive discomfort after just a few weeks of use. Among Greenhorne residents, the consumption of motilac supplements has increased 80% over the last seven years. Last year, Greenhorne’s five hospitals reported fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than any year on record. Meanwhile, sales of motilac supplements are declining in the neighboring town of Etolin. Notably, hospitals in Etolin report a steady increase in the last two years in patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms. The clear explanation of these trends is that motilac is effective in preventing many serious gastrointestinal disorders."

It seems that motilac is effective in preventing serious gastrointestinal disorders, but there is a lot of weakness in the argument.

It is stated that consumption of motilac supplements has increased 80% over last seven years, but the reason for increase in consumption is not mentioned. In last seven years, population of Greenhorne residents could have increased by 80% or more, that would have augmented the need for more Motilac. Setting up of a large number of industries and companies, and colleges had attracted large crowd towards Greenhorne.

Moreover, Price of Motilac have decreased in Greenhorne that could had waxed its consumption. Growth of crops that contain motilac is increased in Greenhorne. Maybe the number of factories that is producing Motilac has increased that would have lowered its price. Lower price means a larger section of society can consume dietary supplement which was earlier prohibitve to them. Per capita income of residents could have increased that could have augmented demand for Motilac.

Furthermore, last year 5 hospitals reported fewer cases of gastrointestinal disorders, Information is provided about only five hospitals and number of cases of the illness is never mentioned. While there is complete information regarding no. of gastrointestinal disorders in hospitals in Etolin, in Greenhorne, information is provided for only five hospitals. There could be other hospitals in Greenhorne where no. of cases of serious gastrointestnal disorders might have increased. A new machine developed last year that is more efficient in treating gastrointestinal disorders is not available in these five hospitals, that would have tempted people to go to other hospitals. Without complete information and data , it cannot be concludedmotilac is effective in preventing many serious gastrointestinal disorders.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 315, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...he need for more Motilac. Setting up of a large number of industries and companies, and colleges ...
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Line 4, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...strointestinal disorders in hospitals in Etolin, in Greenhorne, information is pr...
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Line 4, column 717, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s. Without complete information and data , it cannot be concludedmotilac is effect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, may, moreover, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 279.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62724014337 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30472759691 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498207885305 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6654408597 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.125 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105518237457 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414235286391 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401473161759 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718731787454 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413040583283 0.0628817314937 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1534 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.498 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.231 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.522 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5