The following appeared in the Health section of the Greenhorne Gazette:
“Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract. Many
consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive
discomfort after just a few weeks of use. Among Greenhorne residents, the consumption
of motilac supplements has increased 80% over the last seven years. Last year,
Greenhorne’s five hospitals reported fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than
any year on record. Meanwhile, sales of motilac supplements are declining in the
neighboring town of Etolin. Notably, hospitals in Etolin report a steady increase in the last
two years in patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms.
The clear explanation of these trends is that motilac is effective in preventing many
serious gastrointestinal disorders."
It seems that motilac is effective in preventing serious gastrointestinal disorders, but there is a lot
of weakness in the argument.
It is sateted that consumption of motilac supplements has increased 80% over last seven years, but the reason
for increase in consumption is not mentioned. In last seven years, population of Greenhorne residents
could have increased by 80% or more that would have augmented the need for more Motilac.
Moreover, Price of Motilac could have decreased in Greenhorne that would have waxed its consumption . Per capita income of residents could have
increased that could have augmented demand for Motilac.
Furthermore, last year 5 hospitals reported fewer cases of gastrointestinal disorders
Information is provided about only five hospitals and number of cases is never mentioned.
While there is complete information regarding no. of gastrointestinal disorders in hospitals in Etolin,
in Greenhorne, information is provided for only five hospitals. There could be
other hospitals where no. of cases of serious gastrointestnal disorders might have increased.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, moreover, regarding, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 55.5748502994 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 2260.96107784 42% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 164.0 441.139720559 37% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76829268293 5.12650576532 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 4.56307096286 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3083693297 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 204.123752495 42% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518292682927 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 705.55239521 41% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4460585094 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 5.15768463074 233% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0908175358883 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375812002423 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348488680966 0.0701772020484 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0372203549873 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361341977052 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.89 12.5979740519 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 98.500998004 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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