The following appeared in the Health section of the Greenhorne Gazette:
“Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract. Many
consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive
discomfort after just a few weeks of use. Among Greenhorne residents, the consumption
of motilac supplements has increased 80% over the last seven years. Last year,
Greenhorne’s five hospitals reported fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than
any year on record. Meanwhile, sales of motilac supplements are declining in the
neighboring town of Etolin. Notably, hospitals in Etolin report a steady increase in the last
two years in patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms.
The clear explanation of these trends is that motilac is effective in preventing many
serious gastrointestinal disorders."
The prompt argued that the motilac is effective in preventing gastrointestinal disorvers due the the decline of the Greenhorne community where the increased on the mechine is reported while an increasd digestive discomforted is increased in Etolin which saw a decline in motilac is observed. However, as the conclusion draw from on several unstated assumption, three alternative possible explanations from the stated fact.
To begin, the Greenhorne residents' declining reported gastrointestinal could be due to relocation of the resident to the neighboring town such Etolin. This could be the resulted of the chronic's sanitary issue faced around the five hospitals reported in the arguments; this is backed the facts that the motilac consumption was increasing in the last seven years, but however, the declined digestive disorder reported in the area is last year. Furthermore, the increased patients in Etolin is resulted on
Secondly, the residents on the Greenhorne could have visited the hospital in Etolin. Supported by the seven years of increased digestive medicines comsumpion, the hospitals in Greenhorne could be unable to resolve the disease, thus residents on the Greenhorne inclementally try alternative hospitals in the neighboring town such as Etolin. The declined motilac in Etolin could warrant this hypothesis: as its hospital are more efficient as resolving the digestive disorder, less sale of the mechine is necessary. Therefore, according to this theory, motilac can be proven as non-effective treatment for gastrointestinal symptoms.
The last possible explanation could be that the the report given by the hospitals of the towns does not account for the entire population. the five hosipitals in Greenhorne could have taken in the central town where sanitary systems are properly ensured where as the the hospital in Etolins are located in the rural city with a recent incidents of contaminations of the water sources. As increasing more patients suffers from more distressing gastroitestinal symption in Etolin, stronger treatment are used in Etolin which explained the declining sales in the last years.
As exemplified by the three alternative explanation which all accounts for the fact presented, the true conclusion regarding the effectiveness of motilac remains to be ambigruious.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1930 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.483 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.141 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.85 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...eventing gastrointestinal disorvers due the the decline of the Greenhorne community whe...
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Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...eventing gastrointestinal disorvers due the the decline of the Greenhorne community whe...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: BUT_NEVERTHELESS[1]
Message: Use simply 'but'.
Suggestion: but
...was increasing in the last seven years, but however, the declined digestive disorder report...
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Line 13, column 45, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...last possible explanation could be that the the report given by the hospitals of the to...
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Line 13, column 45, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...last possible explanation could be that the the report given by the hospitals of the to...
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Line 13, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... not account for the entire population. the five hosipitals in Greenhorne could hav...
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Line 13, column 255, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...e sanitary systems are properly ensured where as the the hospital in Etolins are located...
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Line 13, column 264, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...y systems are properly ensured where as the the hospital in Etolins are located in the ...
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Line 13, column 264, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...y systems are properly ensured where as the the hospital in Etolins are located in the ...
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Line 13, column 336, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'incident'?
Suggestion: incident
...located in the rural city with a recent incidents of contaminations of the water sources....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64488636364 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20100621569 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460227272727 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.65293138 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.583333333 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11426471648 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503872339611 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385560228991 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753725370701 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331366581177 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 48.3550499002 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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