The following appeared in the Health section of the Greenhorne Gazette:
“Motilac is a substance that occurs naturally in the human digestive tract. Many
consumers of dietary supplements containing motilac report significant easing of digestive discomfort after just a few weeks of use. Among Greenhorne residents, the consumption of motilac supplements has increased 80% over the last seven years. Last year, Greenhorne’s five hospitals reported fewer cases of serious gastrointestinal disorders than any year on record. Meanwhile, sales of motilac supplements are declining in the neighboring town of Etolin. Notably, hospitals in Etolin report a steady increase in the last two years in patients experiencing a wide range of distressing gastrointestinal symptoms. The clear explanation of these trends is that motilac is effective in preventing many serious gastrointestinal disorders."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could
rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
According to an article of the 'Greenhorne Gazette', the author argues that motilac is an effective way in preventing many serious gastrointestinal disorders. Although the author provides compelling evidence, there are other alternative explanations that rival the author's reasonings. The author ignores the supply and demand fundamentals.
Firstly, the author points out that Greenhorne residents showed less cases of gastrointestinal disorders compared to the residents in Etolin. This is assumed to be the result in the intake of Motalic; however, this reasoning could be due to the need of the supplement. In a study conducted at San Francisco State University, the testers concluded that as a person gets older, the production of motilac decreases (2019). For the author's explanation, the reason for the increase of motilac supplement use could be because there are more older residents in Greenhorne compared to Etolin.
Furthermore, the author fails to take into account of the population of each city. For example, if more people are residing in Greenhorne, then there is a more need for dietary supplements. On the other hand, if Etolin has a smaller population, then there is no need for a large production of suppliments containing motilac.
As the argument stands in its current state, the author fails to recognize the supply and demand fundamentals of their argument. Because of this, the author's argument is unsubstantial and flawed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun cases is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ts out that Greenhorne residents showed less cases of gastrointestinal disorders com...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tion of motilac decreases 2019. For the authors explanation, the reason for the increas...
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Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...pplement use could be because there are more older residents in Greenhorne compared to Eto...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 151, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...of their argument. Because of this, the authors argument is unsubstantial and flawed. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, then, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4449339207 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12148033855 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550660792952 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 705.55239521 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7659427366 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.0 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0932645793795 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332860733866 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372824364269 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0514793559602 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314211500554 0.0628817314937 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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