The following is a recommendation from the city manager of Bridge Bay.
“Last year, the number of visits to our local beach in Bridge Bay was 50 percent lower
than the year before. Early last year we ended our contract with Arko Trash Collection, a
company that had serviced local garbage collection for the past twenty years. We switched at that time to Satellite Waste Corporation, another trash collection company. In nearby Ocean Harbor, where Arko has continued to provide garbage collection, the beaches are experiencing record levels of attendance. Meanwhile, in Bridge Bay, complaints about garbage on our beach have increased this year. Clearly, inadequate garbage collection on our beach by Satellite has led to the significant drop in visitors. Therefore, in order to estore visitor numbers to our local beach, we recommend resuming our contract with Arko as soon as possible.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are
reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The city manage of Bridge Bay argues that the increase of garabge on the beach results in a drop of visitors and claims that resuming the contract with Arko Trash Collection will solve this problem. Although this could be a cause of the drop of visitors in Bridge Bay, the author fails to take into consideration of the time in which the visitors come and the popularity of the beaches that are compared.
Firstly, the author argues that Bridge Bay's visitors count decreased by fifty percent than the year before while Ocean Harbor increased this year. The aurthor believes this is due to the switch to Satellite Waste Corporation; however, the author fails to address what season these statistics came from. For example, the reason for the drop in visitors in Bridge Bay could be because the Winter was longer causing the weather to be colder. The cold weather would prevent any vistors from visiting Bridge Bay. If the author addressed this question, it would help evaluate the recommendation because it would give a better comparison of the amount of visitors that attend both beaches.
Furthermore, the author should also take into consideration of the population of the beach. For instance, of one beach is more popular than the other, this would result in more visitors there. This would result in more pollution at the more popular beach. Despite the change in garabage collection companies, it does not neccissarily mean that this is the reason for the significant drop in visitors at Bridge Bay. Addressing this question would make the author's recommenation more reasonable because it could create a new plan to increase the amount visitors at Bridge Bay.
The author, however, does make a good point in their argument when mentioning how garabge could be a factor in the drop in visitors. For example, visitors will more likely attened a clean beach than a dirity one. The author should include other places that Arko collections trash from. If it is shown that Arko cleans up other beaches that have more visitors, it would aid in the author's recommendation.
The author argues that resuming the contract with Arko Trash Collection will result in the restoration of visitor numbers at the local beach. The author however, fails to address the seasons in which visitors come more often and the popularity of the beaches they compared. As it stands now, there are unanswered questions that the author should consider, leaving the argument unsubstantial and flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The city manage of Bridge Bay argues that the increase of garabge on the beach results in a drop of visitors and claims that resuming the contract with Arko Trash Collection will solve this problem.
Error: garabge Suggestion: garage
Sentence: The aurthor believes this is due to the switch to Satellite Waste Corporation; however, the author fails to address what season these statistics came from.
Error: aurthor Suggestion: author
Sentence: The cold weather would prevent any vistors from visiting Bridge Bay.
Error: vistors Suggestion: victors
Sentence: Despite the change in garabage collection companies, it does not neccissarily mean that this is the reason for the significant drop in visitors at Bridge Bay.
Error: neccissarily Suggestion: necessarily
Error: garabage Suggestion: garbage
Sentence: Addressing this question would make the author's recommenation more reasonable because it could create a new plan to increase the amount visitors at Bridge Bay.
Error: recommenation Suggestion: recommendation
Sentence: The author, however, does make a good point in their argument when mentioning how garabge could be a factor in the drop in visitors.
Error: garabge Suggestion: garage
Sentence: For example, visitors will more likely attened a clean beach than a dirity one.
Error: attened Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: dirity Suggestion: dirty
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2024 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.901 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.509 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.347 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity of the beaches that are compared. Firstly, the author argues that Bridge B...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of visitors that attend both beaches. Furthermore, the author should also take...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se the amount visitors at Bridge Bay. The author, however, does make a good po...
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Line 13, column 381, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...have more visitors, it would aid in the authors recommendation. The author argues...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld aid in the authors recommendation. The author argues that resuming the cont...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04600484262 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5709520176 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44794188862 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9428356306 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.684210526 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177157420224 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683782215087 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653146670926 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115030005617 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534373057625 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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