A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The movie producer wrote to the head of movie studio that they should increase fundings for movie by 10% to improve the quality. To support this idea, he assumed the director is not much experienced since the director was working with shampoo advertisement before and he undermined the advertising business as "wasteful". From the given assumptions, the argument is flaws at various points.
Firstly, movie producer has doubt on director whether he should able to produce a movie in given budget or not, he assumes that the director was previously directed advertisement. Before hiring a director, producer could have ensure that the director will work on the budget or not. also, their is no evidence provided in the memo related to directors previous task. Producer already assumes that the adverising business is wasteful, so he expect to shoot take after take. Whether the director is from shampoo company, but their is no evidence provided in memo that he can be well work with movies too. It may possible that the director is trained as movie director also.
Furthermore, producer stated that they have saved money by hiring inexperienced team of director and producer, and one the hour basis those staff is paid by producer. By this scenario, it is clearly seen that producer have not studied the cost require to produce a movie and he was trying to make movie economical within the least budget. It is not possible to produce best movie within minimum budget and inexperienced team.
By the above assumptions, it is clearly seen that the cost requirements for movie production are not analysed properly by movie producer, and it may possible that due to the weak team, the budget may raise above 10% and then too output will be unsatistified. Producer should first analyze the overall cost and chances should be made in production team so that the movie will be produced as expected and within proper budget.
Major factors stated in memo seems like they have been flawed and improvement is needed with proper reasoning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Use past participle here: 'ensured'.
... hiring a director, producer could have ensure that the director will work on the budg...
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...irector will work on the budget or not. also, their is no evidence provided in the m...
Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: THEIR_IS
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
...r will work on the budget or not. also, their is no evidence provided in the memo rel...
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'expects'.
... adverising business is wasteful, so he expect to shoot take after take. Whether the d...
Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: THEIR_IS
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
...e director is from shampoo company, but their is no evidence provided in memo that he...
Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e director is trained as movie director also. Furthermore, producer stated that th...
Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO
Message: Did you mean 'producing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
...ducer have not studied the cost require to produce a movie and he was trying to make movie...
Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'produce the best'.
Suggestion: produce the best
...the least budget. It is not possible to produce best movie within minimum budget and inexper...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02058823529 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74875719007 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482352941176 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5936202299 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340918666448 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127202739478 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914517702714 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187661181132 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848637359177 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1652 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.54 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.972 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5