Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the essay, the author states that Nature’s Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related product is opening its franchise in the town of Plainville. The reports states that Nature’s Way will be successful because Plainville’s is such an area where merchants report say that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. In addition, the local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, author states that schoolchildren will participate the fitness program and this will beneficial for their store. However, before these recommendations can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, why author is comparing the health food and other health related product’s with other merchants store like running shoes and exercise clothing stores? Is it possible to compare food products with shoes and other accessories? There is possibility that they do not like to eat healthy food. If either of these scenarios is true, then authors, recommendation is significantly weekend.
Secondly, there is possibility they just love shopping running shoes and exercise clothes, no one can say that they are buying products because they love to do exercise. Further, there is possibility that they are buying for giving gift to others exercise-loving peoples. Maybe, they just buy the products for doing exercise or they just enrolled and they do for several days in aerobics classes and weight training but after some time or some months, they can skip and don’t appear for exercise. If the above situation will be true then author argument does not hold water.
Finally, Author’ states that children will be there future customer, but there is possibility that parents can take care of the children’s health because parents are taking care of their health. So, parents can guide their children from their childhood. Perhaps, parents can make healthy food for their children.
In conclusion the argument, as it stands now, it is considerably flawed due to its reliance of several unwanted assumption. If the author is able to answer the above questions and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1876 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.084 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.014 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.311 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
... in the town of Plainville. The reports states that Nature’s Way will be successful be...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weekended'.
Suggestion: weekended
...uthors, recommendation is significantly weekend. Secondly, there is possibility they j...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...can skip and don’t appear for exercise. If the above situation will be true then a...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27717391304 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79021972019 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51902173913 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9246842986 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.888888889 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249793065745 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826094108226 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125204047196 0.0701772020484 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137569402285 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129402350795 0.0628817314937 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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