The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In an article in a business magazine states that a recent study rating 300 male and female, according to the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. In addition, advertising firms studied, those who executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. So the author concludes that if a business wants to prosper then it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. However before these recommendations can be properly evaluated, these questions must be answered.
Firstly, authors assumes that those executives are not good and their firms don’t get higher profits who sleeps more than 6 hours. There is the possibility that some employee who’s is superb than any other employee in that firm in terms of working in company but that employees needs to sleep more than 6 hours. Then firms should fire him and firms should hire only people who need less than 6 hours. If either of these scenarios are true then author’s argument is invalid.
Secondly, author assumes that all 300 male and female biological and their living are same to all over world humans. There can be possibility that only that 300 male and female sleeps no more than 6 hours, but from another country there is possibility that people needs more than 6 hours of sleeps. If the above statements are true then the author argument doesn’t hold water.
Finally, why author-giving suggestion based on advertising author should give suggestion based on scientifically article? Maybe that article in a business magazine is not government verified. In addition, there is possibility that magazine is not popular and no one reads this magazine because of giving unwanted assumptions. If the above questions are true then the author argument significantly weekend.
In the conclusion, the argument as it stands now, it is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumption. If the author is able answer question above and offer more evidence (perhaps in form of systematic research study), then it will be possible to validate the viability of the proposed recommendation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1771 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.892 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...d less than 6 hours of sleep per night. However before these recommendations can be pro...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: ITS_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'who is'?
Suggestion: who is
...e is the possibility that some employee who’s is superb than any other employee in that ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...only people who need less than 6 hours. If either of these scenarios are true then...
^^
Line 5, column 300, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ople needs more than 6 hours of sleeps. If the above statements are true then the ...
^^
Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...because of giving unwanted assumptions. If the above questions are true then the a...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07777777778 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73237901136 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4939228214 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.529411765 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197303728532 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698964976872 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101758040242 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110626299746 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110823620918 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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