In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.
The argument proposed in the passage rests on several assumptions made by the author. Although the author mentions about a observational study, we are not provided with any further data from that study. Moreover, the passage is innundated with vague terminologies that are open to interpretation and subject to fallacy. The validity of the argument cannot be justified unless we are provided with cogent cases bolstered by evidence.
Firstly, the passage has open up with a strong notion to build the Autotech auto mobile manufacturing company to this town. This leads to many questions which are unanswered by the author. For example, How will be Autotech auto mobile manufacturing company benefited from this? What are the ranges property taxes in Hillview? Without citing numerical data this is largely subjective. Without a lucid explanation of these terms, we are left in an ambivalent state and the argument itself is open for debate.
Secondly, the passage has another notion that it will create more employment in Hillview after considering the completion of building. There might be possibility that Autotech has already full capacity of employment rate and the new project will transfer the employees from existing project to another. Thus, without citing further information regarding the employment of these people that the author uses to validate the claim, the argument is subject to fallacy.
Moreover, even if we consider to build project and increase employment rate at Hillview.This does not suffice the fact that reason behind firing of Computech computer software company.There could be possibility that Computech was suffering from inadvertent cost at Hillview.Revenue would have been marginal so they moved their branch to more cheaper area to maximise the profit of the company.
To conclude, without citing more data about the Hillview living expenses, background and employment rate of Automobile company. Moreover, without lucid information about Computect software company and their reason to leave Hillview we cannot reach conclusion with these assumptions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1730 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.34 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.214 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.321 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hor. Although the author mentions about a observational study, we are not provide...
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Line 2, column 291, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ranges'' or 'range's'?
Suggestion: ranges'; range's
...mpany benefited from this? What are the ranges property taxes in Hillview? Without cit...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...nd increase employment rate at Hillview.This does not suffice the fact that reason b...
^^^^
Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
... of Computech computer software company.There could be possibility that Computech was...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Revenue
...ering from inadvertent cost at Hillview.Revenue would have been marginal so they moved ...
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Line 4, column 337, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'cheaper' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: cheaper
... marginal so they moved their branch to more cheaper area to maximise the profit of the comp...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52959501558 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89278128081 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535825545171 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3543343563 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.9375 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137511721803 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455174354877 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416316173462 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736302282197 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618556114377 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.3550499002 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.197005988 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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