"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The assertion suggests that the reason why the quantity of people has plunged in central plaza is mainly because of the skateboard users enlarged number and due to some unethical actions as well. Therefore, restricting skateboarding may solve the problem.
In my opinion, it may be true that vandalism and wandering of skateboard users are causing some problems to the shoppers. Yet, there is no solid or validated proof of that. there may be some other factors like the atomosphere of the shooping plaza has changed.For Instance, may be it was easier to shop but nowadays the environment is not so compelling. In addition to that there might be another factor like cleanliness. The shopping complex has become dirty than before not just resulting from vandalism but also from other carelessness of tthe authority.
Moreover, the author has not mentioned anything regarding the palce where the Cetral plaza is located. there is a possibility that recently there has been a new shopping plaza in that area which led the shoppers to go there instead of this one. As a human being, we are habituted to feel attracted to explore something new whatever that is, lets be a object or a palce. For example, that new shopping plaza may has some new facilties which inhabitants of that area have found to be convenient and lucrative.
Lastly, to my point of view, the author accusing the vandalism and littering as a negetive factor affecting the bussiness of central plaza and suggesting that prohibiting the skateboarding may revive the bussiness once again. but what if that's the only reason people still comes to this plaza since there is a oppurtunity for such activities to continue. nowadays, urbanization proliferated in such a way that we hardly get any chancesor free spaces for such activities.
Therefore, I think the assumption and the solution made by the author is not solidated becuase of reliance on some flawed assurances. if the author may able to answer logically to these points with some strong proofs then may be we can validate the solution as said.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1685 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.842 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.671 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.662 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...is no solid or validated proof of that. there may be some other factors like the atom...
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Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...phere of the shooping plaza has changed.For Instance, may be it was easier to shop ...
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Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...hooping plaza has changed.For Instance, may be it was easier to shop but nowadays the ...
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Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...alce where the Cetral plaza is located. there is a possibility that recently there ha...
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Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...something new whatever that is, lets be a object or a palce. For example, that n...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...omething new whatever that is, lets be a object or a palce. For example, that new...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ng may revive the bussiness once again. but what if thats the only reason people st...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...e the bussiness once again. but what if thats the only reason people still comes to t...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...till comes to this plaza since there is a oppurtunity for such activities to cont...
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Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nowadays
...tunity for such activities to continue. nowadays, urbanization proliferated in such a wa...
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Line 9, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... of reliance on some flawed assurances. if the author may able to answer logically...
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Line 9, column 223, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ese points with some strong proofs then may be we can validate the solution as said. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00576368876 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79903502686 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547550432277 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0072476802 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5625 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118863772142 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388227198007 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493850837732 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733183113476 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600449854321 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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