Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The author concluded that by reducing skateboarding, the number of shoppers can be increased. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors , on the basis of which the argument could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which there is no clear evidences. Thus, the argument is weak, unconvincing and having several flaws.
First of all, the number of shopper in central plaza is steadily reducing. The author has not mentioned what is the source of this data. Without a definite statistics , it can not be presumed that there is really a reduction of shoppers. Moreover, it plausible that the survey was conducted in the period when the citizens of the area have left out somewhere during vacation. Thus, the authenticity of this data is dubious.
Secondly, The author has tried to make a strong relationship between increase number of skateboarding and reduction in number of shoppers. No clear evidence was shown between this relationship. It is highly possible that due to advancement of technology, people these days prefer for window shopping as this is not only convenient but also cheaper. Moreover, skateboarding has nothing to do with shopping and no clear association was made.
Thirdly, interrelationship between increase in litter and vandalism and number of skateboarding users was not made need further examination.
Finally, it was recommended that skateboarding in central plaza should be prohibited in order to increase the shoppers . Does the author think reducing skateboarding really bring back the shoppers ? what is the evidence behind such conclusion? Rather it urges to examine the potential factors contributing for the reduction in shoppers. Therefore, a detailed survey need to be done in order to bring the shoppers back.
To summaries, the argument seems weak and unconvincing based on the given information. It could be strengthened if the author mentioned these facts. Therefore, a in-depth examination is needed and knowledge should be gathered to substantiate the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1681 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.22 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.023 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.794 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.03 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 322.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38198757764 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14359713438 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515527950311 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1015949245 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7727272727 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6363636364 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130164900968 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404766937679 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741020707363 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674058299793 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442573307438 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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