"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
The business manager of a television station in a memorandum states that the since the news channel has increased the time devoted to national news compared to local and weather news, they have received complaints form their weather and local news viewer about the concern of less coverage. Also, it is stated that the advertisement contracts of the local businesses have been cancelled with them. Therefore, the time devoted to weather and local news should be restored. The claim by the manager lacks strong evidences and seems to be totally based on assumption. This argument can be supported if provided with the two evidences mentioned below.
Firstly, the business manager states that the complaints are received from the local and weather news viewer but never was it mentioned that the viewer is complaining about the time constraint. The viewer must have called to complain about being dissatified with the local and weather news, isn't it possible? It could be, right. The viewer must be complaining about their wrong news being potrayed. Like the news is showing some local news which took place before a period of time or the news is abasing the people of a locality or the weather news must be contradicting or wrong predictions or incorrect day forecasts are shown. In such a scenario, there would be no reason to restore the time devoted to these news as they are faulty.
Secondly, the cancellation of advertisting contracts by the local businesses. It could be the case that the news channel does not have high viewer rate at the late-night news,isn't it possible? Therefore, if there would be less viewer to view the advertisements then the local businesses owner wou;d find it appropriate to cancel the contract with the news channel and invest with the news channel which are in high demand and has high viewer compared to the current news channel. Hereby, the managers another statement is ill-founded and needs further evidence to justify the statement.
Lastly, if the manager is succesful in providing the evidences of whether the complain of the viewers were regarding less time devoted to the news or was there some other reason and also whether the cancellation of contract of the advertising of various local businesses was because of the less time constraint or whether there were feasible other reasons. If the manager is able to provide the evidences in the memorandum then his argument would be totally agreeable but now as the manager fails to provide such evidences, the argument can be stated vague and full of assumptions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2096 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.863 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.893 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the since the'. Did you mean 'since the'?
Suggestion: since the
...ion station in a memorandum states that the since the news channel has increased the time dev...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...tified with the local and weather news, isnt it possible? It could be, right. The vi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...me local news which took place before a period of time or the news is abasing the people of a ...
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Line 3, column 707, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...o reason to restore the time devoted to these news as they are faulty. Secondly, the ca...
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Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , isnt
... high viewer rate at the late-night news,isnt it possible? Therefore, if there would ...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...high viewer rate at the late-night news,isnt it possible? Therefore, if there would ...
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Line 7, column 23, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the statement. Lastly, if the manager is succesful in providing the evidences ...
^^
Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...l in providing the evidences of whether the complain of the viewers were regarding less time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0093676815 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67342289393 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416861826698 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.6821035494 57.8364921388 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.823529412 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36677227557 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137338882897 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12270393122 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250557369943 0.128457276422 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835734778137 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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