The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership is an innate quality and over the time it gradually increases and makes one liable to become a leader. Albeit, there are disparate reasons to make young people ready for the leadership in any field, be it government, industry or any other. The prompt suggests that the young people should be taught to cooperate rather than instilling in them a sense of competition. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the claim because of two reasons.
First of all, to become a good leader (like President or Prime minister) one needs to have a proper conduct to life and follow some decorum as the whole nation has their eyes on them and many younger generation people see them as their role model and walk on the footsteps or steeping stones laid by them. It is possible that to become a leader one has to giveup all their bad habits and add many new traits like being a good listener, disinterested atorney and many more but does the leader not focus in his/her competition and should build a decorum of cooperation? Should the young people only be cooperative and not competitive? If so happens, then the leader would not be able to achieve soaring heights and can never become a famous and good leader as the person is ignoring the competition and instilling sense of cooperation within. To become a good and famous leader, the younger ones should be taught to analyze their opponent parties plans or tricks to lay their party down and being aware of the very next move of the opponent party in advance will help the leader of the party to counterattack rather than just sit there keeping hands on hands and doing no good and letting the parties name get degraded.
Further, the society on the other hand plays a vital role as the surrounding matters where the to-be leader is born and brought up and whether the values taught to him/her are correct and of proper conduct or is he/she too bellicose and eager to rip of anyone and everyone who comes in the path of him/her becoming the leader. So, for becoming a good leader one should be taught to respect every individual and should have a fluent decency in the voice and should never sound deceitful or give a speech which is too prolix and the audience or the supporters find themselves troubled of ennui but should rather flatter even the opponent by his/her speech. Cooperation is a much later lesson to be taught, to be succesful the person needs to have the various other characteristics and the important one being the way they carry themselves or portray themselves in public as a person who is a bacchanalian and is seen every week near the clubs drinking and dancing then the image of the person is tarnished and this could harm the future of his/her leadership journey.
Lastly, in the conclusion, there would be many who would agree to the claim that young people should be taught to cooperate and not to compete but this is totally quixotic. As in this highly competitive world, how can one succeed if they were asked to just cooperate and not to compete? The person would remain in the same spot and there would be no progress or growth in the individual as cooperation would not let the indivdual to think and compute as would it will be if one competes.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, so, still, then, as to, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 44.0 14.8657303371 296% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62260869565 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48886153854 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459130434783 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.24130273 60.3974514979 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.2 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.3333333333 23.4991977007 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136051874226 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064727546342 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055663295333 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100481209507 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615000188723 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.1392134831 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, so, still, then, as to, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 44.0 14.8657303371 296% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62260869565 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48886153854 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459130434783 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.24130273 60.3974514979 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.2 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.3333333333 23.4991977007 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136051874226 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064727546342 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055663295333 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100481209507 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615000188723 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.1392134831 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.