An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor s record of treating similarly afflicted patients Through gaining such access the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

The recommendation that the ailing patient should have an easy access to the doctor's record of treating similar patients as it can help the ailing patient know better about the doctor whether he or she can treat the medical condition affectively or not. The recommendation seems to be a wonderful advice as after checking the details of the doctor records one can get to know the various medical conditions, the symptoms and further more as to what extent is the patient being going through a change to recover from the medical condition.

The patient who can check upon the doctor's record are more confident as they know that the doctor's previous record for treating the ailment is successful with a reasonable number of unsuccessful treatment hereby it is said that every story has two sides of it.If there is positive side then there always is a negative side as over here being with the successful and unsuccessful treatment cases.The ailing patient will be more pleased to seek treatment from a doctor who has more experience and has successfully treated patients and has lesser number of unsuccessful treatments history.

I would like to add a personal experience as to I was suffering from PCOS some years back which is a very common ailment in teenage girls but when i got to know that there are cysts in my ovaries, I was completely devastated and can't even put in words what all thoughts were soaking in my mind. Then after a week or so I started doing the research to find the best doctor for my treatment and the basis on which I distinguished doctors was upon their experience in the field and the success story as to how fast and easily have they changed life of many suffering girls and hereby helped them to live life will full zeal.I gave my example just to bolster the recommendation that the records must be an easy access to the ailing patient as reading the success stories can help them proceed further to fight their condition and not to overthink over whether i will be alright or not. The records of the doctor can also help the ailing patient to know the various symptoms that are faced because of the medicines or the medical condition and can also know the various prerequisites for the medical condition. The financial expenses can also be known from the records and hereby will help reduce the fallacies that sometimes happen with new ailing patient.Thereby there are various factors such as the aforementioned points to underpin the recommendation and at the end help the ailing patient. In the conclusion, the recommendation suggested above is truly liable and I hereby agree with the term that the doctor's record should be made easily available to the ailing patient to under gird their mental health along with the hope to be treated and being successful to have been fought that medical condition and stand straight up with head held high to experience the normal life again.

The records of the doctor can also help the ailing patient to know the various symptoms that are faced because of the medicines or the medical condition and can also know the various prerequisites for the medical condition. The financial expenses can also be known from the records and hereby will help reduce the fallacies that sometimes happen with new ailing patient. Thereby there are various factors such as the aforementioned points to underpin the recommendation and at the end help the ailing patient.

In the conclusion, the recommendation suggested above is truely liable and I hereby agree with the term that the doctor's record should be made easily available to the ailing patient to undergird their mental health along with the hope to be treated and being successful to have been fought that medical condition and stand straight up with head held high to experience the normal life again.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3173.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 654.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85168195719 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64791058797 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.339449541284 0.4932671777 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 979.2 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 23.0359550562 234% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 141.87266885 60.3974514979 235% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 264.416666667 118.986275619 222% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.5 23.4991977007 232% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368663918616 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186950693685 0.0831039109588 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136224379938 0.0758088955206 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264533166546 0.150359130593 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110921724639 0.0667264976115 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.7 14.1392134831 203% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.13 48.8420337079 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 12.1743820225 191% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.74 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 11.2143820225 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments