The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument written in the article by Dr.Karp states that the earlier study of an anthropologist, Mr. Filed that the children of Tertia where raised by the whole village is false as in the recent interview with children of various island including Tertia speak more about their biological parents then others of the village and further adds that more understanding about reared children of Tertia will be known after the survey they are carrying out now. The argument mentioned totally lacks evidence to support his claim and is based on assumptions. There are three reasons/evidences which if provided will help Dr.Karp bolster his claim.
Firstly, the anthropologist, Dr.Karp is trying to falsify a claim which was made twenty years ago. Isn’t twenty years a long period of time? Within a span of two decades many of these things must have changed and even the child-rearing tradition. Therefore, instead of surveying or interviewing the children, the anthropologist must interview the ones who were child when Dr.Field concluded his observations, i.e., the adults aged between twenty to thirty years as they were the ones who were children when Dr.Field visited Tertia.
Secondly, the interview taken by Dr.Karp has children living in the group of islands which include Tertia. What if the interviewing children have a very less count of children from Tertia like only one or two amongst twenty? Therefore, Dr.Karp should provide the information of how many children were interviewed from Tertia solely (as there can be cases that for a group of fifty children who were interviewed only two or three of them were children from Tertia) and based on that only his conclusion can be taken into consideration otherwise the claim of his research is totally inaccurate.
Thirdly, the author states that further understanding will be known about the rearing culture of Tertia as a team of students are working on the interview centered method but the interview is taken again of the children then it is of no use as they are not the ones who were reared by the village when Dr.Field visited Tertia. Therefore, the interviewing should be done taking into consideration the above-mentioned points and for better understanding each and every age group of the village should be interviewed.
In the conclusion, the claim in the article is ill-founded and needed better evidences to bolster the claim. If the author takes into consideration the aforementioned evidences and helps provide them then he would have some unfalsifiable claims which now are not mentioned and therefore making his claim totally based on assumptions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2149 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.918 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.775 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.644 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...e argument written in the article by Dr.Karp states that the earlier study of an ant...
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Suggestion: is
...There are three reasons/evidences which if provided will help Dr.Karp bolster his ...
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Suggestion: Karp
...vidences which if provided will help Dr.Karp bolster his claim. Firstly, the ant...
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Suggestion: Karp
...im. Firstly, the anthropologist, Dr.Karp is trying to falsify a claim which was ...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ty years ago. Isn’t twenty years a long period of time? Within a span of two decades many of t...
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Suggestion: Field
...terview the ones who were child when Dr.Field concluded his observations, i.e., the a...
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Suggestion: Field
...were the ones who were children when Dr.Field visited Tertia. Secondly, the inter...
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Suggestion: Karp
... Secondly, the interview taken by Dr.Karp has children living in the group of isl...
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Suggestion: Karp
...ne or two amongst twenty? Therefore, Dr.Karp should provide the information of how m...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field
... who were reared by the village when Dr.Field visited Tertia. Therefore, the intervie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17605633803 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90168667095 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457746478873 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.988298473 57.8364921388 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.5 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4285714286 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35441056779 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121620015366 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935694557522 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193530662723 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102623085997 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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