Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
The prompt states about two groups which contradict on how a child is influenced by violence. One group believes that the increasing violence is media has caused great increase in violence in society especially on children whereas the other believes that the influence on child is mostly influenced by the parents and the peer group of the children. In my opinion, the other group is the one whose views aign with mine as the children highly look up-to their parents and close ones rather than media. The prompt of the other group can be espoused by illustrating some reasons as follows.
The children learn what they see and at such an early age they are not to able to distinguish between good or bad until the tutelary guides/teaches the child about them. If the child is watching some media channel along with his/her parents(as why would a child watch media channels on thier own), there are chances that the child watches some violence and get influenced. Hereby, the parents are the ones who need to take care of what the child watches and need to give a check of whether the show or channel is not causing any negative harm or influencing the children.
Children mostly spend their time with the peer group and parents as there is nothing else what they have to do other than going to school and chilling at home. Therefore, the children watch out the action in the surrounding like at home(greatly) and at the school(if a child has grown enough to attend school) and get influenced not only for the bad ones but also for some good ones. If the child saw/heard any of his/her parent gettong angry on someone then the child will adopt that behavior and in some cases mimic it in front of the parent who did it. Likewise, the children are greatly influenced by how the parents behave when they are around the child.
The children admire whom the parents admire. Therefore, if the parent by any chnaces is too mus=ch into fighting and boxing then the child would notice or learn that their parent is wathign boxing or admiring a boxing star as their role model then the child will adapt some of the character traits of the boxer as the child watches him/her along with the parent. There is no bad in watching something like boxing(it is a great sport) but in the enriching period the children will get influenced by the violent behavior of the boxer rather than watching it as a sport and it would solely be the fault of the parent as one should shun from watching violent acts or do any in front of the children. Atlast, the children adapt things quickly which are bad than which are good.
Lastly, the children group is a much sensitive group as whatever they learn in childhood is the root of their personality or behavior. The care needs to be taken whether the child is learning only good actions and abducting the bad/violent ones. Therefore, the children's care taken is fully dependent on the parents and the peer groups and not on any media channel as believed by some people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, likewise, look, so, then, therefore, whereas, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 533.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61726078799 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32257589975 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412757973734 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7913639692 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.722222222 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6111111111 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343993325628 0.243740707755 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132519420985 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136471271252 0.0758088955206 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221868371884 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117555204092 0.0667264976115 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 48.8420337079 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 12.1743820225 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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