Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.
The argument that viewership can be increased and advertising revenue losses can be avoided by devoting more time to weather and local news is a flawed one. Because, to arrive at that conclusion, further evidence is needed about the viewership of last five years, no of complaints in last five years, and about the local businesses interests in advertising.
Firstly, if the viewership was increased last year and if this was because of increased time for national news then, it will be imbecile to decrease the time devoted to national news and restore the time devoted to local and weather news, because this may decrease the viewership and revenue of news channel.
Secondly, if the number of complaints received last year is lesser than that of last five years then, this may be because of increased time to national news. What if the number of complaints received is more when they had devoted more time to local and weather news? So, it is not lucrative for the channel to restore the time devoted to weather and local news.
Thirdly, what if the local companies were not interested in advertising in any news channel and they were preferred other media like newwpapers and magaazines etc.? Then, the revenue from advertising may decrease even the news channel increased the time devoted to local and weather news.
Finally, to avoid losing revenue from local businesses and to attract more viewers, they don't have to restore the time devoted to weather and local news to former level, they can increase the time or they can devote equal amount of time to both national and local, weather news.
The argument could be strengthened if the evidences about the viewership of last five years, number of complaints received in last five years, and local businesses interests in advertising were provided. Hence, in current form, this argument is an erroneous one.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Thirdly, what if the local companies were not interested in advertising in any news channel and they were preferred other media like newwpapers and magaazines etc.?
Error: newwpapers Suggestion: newspapers
Error: magaazines Suggestion: magazines
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1514 1500
No. of Different Words: 112 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.806 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.491 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.762 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...bout the viewership of last five years, no of complaints in last five years, and a...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ime devoted to weather and local news. Thirdly, what if the local companies wer...
^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ime devoted to local and weather news. Finally, to avoid losing revenue from lo...
^^^
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...esses and to attract more viewers, they dont have to restore the time devoted to wea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03821656051 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54398604249 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 204.123752495 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.366242038217 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.2564304096 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.818181818 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.54545454545 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409326433795 0.218282227539 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205327308063 0.0743258471296 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12820215791 0.0701772020484 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261888957072 0.128457276422 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124103281301 0.0628817314937 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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