"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
The writer of this analytical piece concludes that in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further revenues, the television station should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level. To support the claim, the writer has cited the complaints received from viewers and the cancellation of the contract between the television station and advertising company. Yet, there is certain evidence missing to reach any conclusion.
Firstly, the author states that over the past year, the late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. But the author failed to provide any statistical data to reach the conclusion. First of all, how many viewers watch late-night programs? how many complaints received before introducing changes in late-night programs concerning the less time devoted to national news? Unless this information is provided, we cannot conclude that viewers are declining and the contract was canceled due to fewer viewers.
Secondly, the author cites the complaints received from viewers concerning with our station's coverage of weather and local news. At first glance, this evidence might seem convincing. However, here the author ignores the possibility of the number of viewers may be increased. The increased number of complaints concerning the station's coverage of weather and local news is due to the increased number of viewers of the late-night program.
Finally, the author mentions that local businesses that used to advertise during late night news program of the television station have canceled their advertising contracts with us. But, we do not know whether these local businesses also have canceled their advertising contract with other television station or not? If this the case, the local businesses canceled their advertising contracts with all the television station because they see no benefit in advertising during the late-night program. So, the author's conclusion that the local businesses have canceled their contract with the television station just due to increased time allocated to national news is not credible.
In conclusion, to evaluate the author's conclusion, we need statistics data that provides the viewers before the new policy implementation and after the changes. In addition, the author should have to provide whether the local business has canceled their advertising contract with the station due to increased time devoted to national news or there is another reason. Unless this information is provided, we can not conclude that by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level is necessary to avoid losing any further advertising revenues and attract more viewers cannot be supported.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2311 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.325 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.675 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.787 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd to avoid losing any further revenues, the television station should restore th...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...many viewers watch late-night programs? how many complaints received before introdu...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stations'' or 'station's'?
Suggestion: stations'; station's
...sed number of complaints concerning the stations coverage of weather and local news is d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 508, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... during the late-night program. So, the authors conclusion that the local businesses ha...
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Line 11, column 32, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
.... In conclusion, to evaluate the authors conclusion, we need statistics data tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44700460829 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71547860152 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.39400921659 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0768665177 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.421052632 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8421052632 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394464305647 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15006591673 0.0743258471296 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146384487853 0.0701772020484 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263980725497 0.128457276422 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113844606194 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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