The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The main purpose of the leadership is to lead an organization towards the success. Thus, it is necessary for a society to prepare its young people for leadership skill which will be helpful for them to be a successful leader in government, industry, or other fields. Some people would argue that the students can perform best when they are put in the environment of competition. According to me, though competition may boost the students' performance, it is not good for leadership.
It is the responsibility of the political leader to lead the country in the right direction through a difficult situation. A political leader should be a concern with the well being of the people they serve rather than thinking only about oneself. Thus, a leader developed in the competitive atmosphere may be not able to put well being of the people of a country. Consequently, such leaders fail to lead society towards the progress in a most efficient way. This situation can be reversed, if society will decide to prepare its young generation for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation instead of competition then they will be proved more beneficial to society.
Consider a role of leadership in the business organization or industries. The primary responsibility of a CEO( chief executive officer) or any other departmental managers is to increase the profit of their companies by improving productivity and efficiency of their employees. And only a true leader can increase the work efficiency of their team members through his/her cooperation skills. For instance, a manager in a company tries to improve the relationship between his/her team members through healthy discussions and debates. Thus, a manager can improve the efficiency of his/her team members by promoting them to work together, not for individual growth. Because if a person thinks about only his/her interest then he may beneficial to only him/her self, but if one thinks about an organization or a society then he will be proved beneficial to oneself as well as a society.
However, some would argue that a sense of competition help an individual to give one's best performance. For instance, an ambition of getting promotion in a company helps one to give one's best performance. But, if a person focuses on the growth of a company then he/she will be beneficial to him/herself as well as a company. Definitely, cooperation may slow down a speed of individual grow
In conclusion, I believe that competition can help an individual to get success. But cooperation helps one to achieve one's goal and in addition help in the development of a society. Thus, society should instill a sense of cooperation rather than competition in its young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...to me, though competition may boost the students performance, it is not good for leaders...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... than thinking only about oneself. Thus, a leader developed in the competitive at...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...f the people of a country. Consequently, such leaders fail to lead society toward...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'ones the best'.
Suggestion: ones the best
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Suggestion: ones the best
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06888888889 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07268411236 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426666666667 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8757475311 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.619047619 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266515260092 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785496205335 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100703446238 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158255773571 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120926177762 0.0667264976115 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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