Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
The author of the passage talks about paleo diets and its increasing popularity. According to the passage, the followers of diet maintain that these types of food, like bone broth, are health promoting, heal joints and bolster nerve regeneration. The author fails to present a cogent argument as his claims are riddled with unwarranted assumptions.
First and foremost, the author does not apprise about the proponents, their demographics, number of paleo diet practitioners or their geographical location. He doesn't even mention the time frame or the causal theories that resulted in atavism of diets of early humanoids in present ages. This missing information is very important to test the probity and extent of the author's claim.
Additionally, he has not given any information about the animals from whose bones the humanoids prepared the broth. It might be the case that those species are vulnerable, extant only in certain parts of the world or even be extinct. The passage lacks information about whether the nutrients that are present in the bone broth, like cartilage and chondroitin, can be taken by other sources of food like vegetables or fruits. It does not inform about the other food items, life style and physical excersizes that the hominids indulged in. It is likely that they would be eating other items and savories which would provide them with these nutrients and benefits.
Moreover, the author fails to take into consideration the changing life styles of people from the early to present ages. The world is progressing fast and becoming increasing corporate these days. Most people work in a stressful atmosphere for long hours in offices and cubicles. It depraves them of calmness, peace, physical excersize and yoga. Fast food is the new trend these days as it is available readily. People are facing health issues as fast food is essentially devoid of nutrients and is not too salubrious. Increasing pollution is also one the major reasons for some chronic diseases like asthama.
All in all, the author makes presumptious assumptions and the passage also lacks vital information for the author to make a compulsive agrument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1766 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.031 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.325 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.211 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19428571429 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72494148973 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551428571429 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2743985005 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.6842105263 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52631578947 5.70786347227 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197979861838 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551498568887 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392080019828 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951901457776 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497444345465 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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