When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
It is of utmost importance for children to have an all-round development early in their lives. This will not only help them to gain knowlegde and enjoy but will also help them to choose a suitable career path for themselves. Schools hence play an important part in shaping a child's life and career. While it is important to stay fit, children play enough outdoor games during evening hours to keep them energetic. They would seldom learn new skills like painting, singing or playing an instrument untill and unless compelled by their parents to do so. Thus, it is more feasible to cut physical education classes first rather than art and music classes.
To start with, cutting physical education classes would save more money that cutting art and music classes. For art and music classes, the students can easily be asked to bring their own canvas, paints, brushes and musical instruments. On the other hand, maintenance of cricket and football grounds, badminton, basketball and tennis courts has to be done by the school administration itself. They can't ask school children to trim overgrown grass, level the uneven grounds or sweep and clean the courts. Cutting physical education class will save enormous maintenance costs.
Moreover, the students have to leave their classes and reach the grounds for various sports activities. However, most of the children roam around the campus, be it in academic buildings, gardens or the canteen. They even take up more than half of the time of the next class to report to their teachers. For instance, in my school, it took 5 minutes to reach from our class to the sports arena. We deliberately took almost 15 minutes to reach there and requested our sports teacher to allow us to play for those missed 15 minutes. Even after being late, we used to roam around the campus before reaching our class.
Additionally, art and music is one of the important skill sets that might come in handy during functions and celebrations. Children can even go on to pursue this hobby as a profession being highly paid artists and musicians. They can still play sports in their spare time at evenings. To illustrate this, I would like to mention about one of my friends. He loves painting and even used to sit in the art room during sports or free periods. Currently, he is a well known artist in my city, with his paintings being regularly featured in art exhibitions.
All in all, to curb the problem of funding or lack of teachers, physical education classes must be eliminated first. It would also give time to students to learn about their core subjects and do well in exams.
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84821428571 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51080255382 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.1026924838 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.88 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.92 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.24 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218680221855 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606282257502 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547243699325 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127282438514 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532718334368 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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