When schools do not have enough funding or teachers some people think physical education classes should be cut while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first Which do you think is preferable and why

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When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

No one can deny that are both positive and negative aspects of each subject at school life. If I was forced to choose what I would cut down first, I would definitely cut physical education first. I would do for a number of reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, arts and music are so much important in your lifes, to develop our creativity, artistic sense, and other things. About physical education, we can practice soccer, or make another physical activities outside of school, but in arts and music, me create and stimulate our creativity inside the school, by drawing, by searching one famous singer, or a famous painter, and then, have some inspirations with his or her ideas. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by a several personal experiences, and I will tell one of them. When I was younger, I rate to drawn and listing some music, but, when I started at high school, I understood that with art and music, we can express ourselves.
Secondly, nowadays, I feel that, the artists are all the same, like, all rap singers tell about guns and drugs in their music, I think, if they had more arts and music when they were at school, they would have another thought about the world, and the way they see it. When I was fifteen years old, I really enjoy to listen some rap, because they used to talk about the society and the ways that everybody saw each one.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly think that schools should cut first physical education, if they don`t have enough money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'experience'?
Suggestion: experience
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy listening'.
Suggestion: enjoy listening
... When I was fifteen years old, I really enjoy to listen some rap, because they used to talk abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, as for, i feel, i think, all the same, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64539007092 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51565192393 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585106382979 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3010822426 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249847457805 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941968007946 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602121560998 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155432106933 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525260762937 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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