Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they
The author points out in this argument, that, our ancestors knew something unique about our physiology that we don't know. To support his contention he mentioned how Paleo diets can help to prevent diseases. However, his conclusion is based on some unwarranted assumptions, that, to make his thesis more acceptable and persuasive needs to be addressed.
First, he claims Paleo diets are gaining popularity. Now the question is among whom is this practice getting popularity? Maybe this type of diets is getting popularity among certain individuals, or certain tribes who are actually not a representative sample of the entire population. Maybe they are people who live a primitive life, like tribes of the Amazon or Africa and don't have enough knowledge about scientific eating habits. If this is the case, then the author's claim that Paleo diet is getting popular is misattributed.
Secondly, the author states about the people's claim who follow paleo diet, about how good it is for health. One may easily have a reservation about the authenticity of these claim. Maybe these people have no idea about human physiology at all. perhaps they are just making some unrealistic claim to promote their practice.
It may even be the case that, these types of diets may also cause damage to our digestion system and other digestive organs. If the people's claim about Paleo diet's healthiness is not scientific and agreeable to our health, then the author's claim that this diet can cure many chronic illnesses may not hold water.
Finally, the author says that there is some anecdotal evidence about bone broth causes fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases but provides no scientific evidence. It may be true that people who ate bone broth had less chronic diseases but that doesn't prove the effectiveness of bone broth. Some people are naturally or genetically resistant to certain illness. maybe people who ate bone broth had some other advantages that protected them from illness. There is not much evidence and proof that bone broth was the only factor in preventing illness.
Primitive people might or might not know anything new, and Paleo diet may or may not have health benefits. But the author failed to provide enough plausible reason and scientific data to back his claim. Further scientific research about eating habit and physiology of ancient people may help to make his conclusions more plausible.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1975 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.975 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.686 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ve needs to be addressed. First, he claims Paleo diets are gaining popula...
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...ive a primitive life, like tribes of the Amazon or Africa and dont have enough kn...
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...ike tribes of the Amazon or Africa and dont have enough knowledge about scientific ...
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...stive organs. If the peoples claim about Paleo diets healthiness is not scientifi...
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...roth had less chronic diseases but that doesnt prove the effectiveness of bone broth. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18527918782 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60199327182 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9433668406 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8636363636 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16891223823 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553467450516 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288227191376 0.0701772020484 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876558155537 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291099812317 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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