Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

The author claims that the Pirouettes Ballet school is the best choice among all schools of Elmtown so anyone who desires to become a successful dancer should join this school. Though the author's argument appears to be convincing at first glimpse, the proposed argument is unlikely to bear fruits as author has based his stance on tenuous reasoning and incomplete evidence that can be seen from the following four reasons.

Firstly, the author claims that teachers of Pirouettes Ballet school have danced in most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. This cannot be the sufficient reason to claim that the Pirouettes Ballet school is the clear choice for the students. There is a lack of retrospect analysis not taken into consideration for other schools of the Elmtown. What is there are more schools available with the teachers having danced in prestigious companies too. The author fail to take into account this pivotal factor and readily comes to conclusion.Also, the author assumes that the students have become professional dancer after graduating from their school. Their might be the case that the students have undergone through more courses after graduating from there ballet school that has led to profound growth in there career as a professional dancer. So just completing courses from the Pirouettes Ballet school shouldn't be assume to become a successful dancer that author claims.

Secondly, the author readily assumes that there students have become professional dancers with no statistical data as to how many of their students have become professional dancers. This statement is a stretch that the author makes. What if there are other schools with more number of professional dancer than Pirouettes Ballet school which author fails to provide making author's argument to stand on no legs. Morever, the most of the students those who have joined the Pirouettes school could be prodigy child that have innate abilities helping them to learn and grow fast on their own without much help required from the school. The author hasn't mentioned the details on their academic background before declaring their school as the best school of the Elmtown.

Though there are several issues with the author's argument at present, with research and clarification, the argument can be improved significantly. For example, the author should have included the statistical data for various schools available in the town, the enumeration of students that have become professional dancers later, the reasonable cost of their courses from that of other schools.

In a sum, as seen from the above mentioned arguments and reasons, we can conclude that the author's stance is acute to several questioning due to lack of evidence provided and hence open to debate.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25900900901 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63163604599 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439189189189 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1898318326 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.352941176 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1176470588 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340493219451 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143789232636 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13873744548 0.0701772020484 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180750900816 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14171499172 0.0628817314937 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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