The problem of poor teacher performance that has plagued the state’s public school systems is bound to become a good deal less serious in the future. The state has initiated comprehensive guidelines that oblige teachers to complete a number of required credits in education and educational psychology at the graduate level before being certified.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumption proves unwarranted.
The author of the claim above argues that the introduction of some extra courses concerning the educational field at the graduate level will be likely to substantially improve the quality of public-school teaching. Anyway, while supporting his thesis he has provided poor and shallow evidence that can be easily weakened.
Firstly, he wrote about the poor performances of public teachers, but he did not analyze what they depend on. Without having this information, we are not able to understand which area of their formation should be strengthened. So, even if their educational formation would be improved by the introduction of the course he has suggested, it is not well-reasoned to assume that their overall skillset, and thus their ability as a teacher, would get better. For instance, if their weaknesses were mostly in the knowledges of their specific subject, not only any advantages would not be introduced by this measure, but also lot of national funds would be wasted.
On the other side of the argument, if we even try to assume for a moment that teacher’s difficulties only concern the educational part, we have no evidence that the measures will have the positive consequences predicted by the author. As a matter of fact, no additional data regarding experiments or studies on this topic has been provided in his sentence. All this is to say that, even if on one hand the introduction of these measures will give more theorical skills to the educators, nobody has the certainty that their gained skills will be applied to the everyday teaching.
In conclusion, if the author had provided some data about the teachers’ main points of weakness and he had given some confirms that the courses concerned will give practical improvement to the education’s quality, his argument would have been complete and correct. However, just few information is given in the text and the points of uncertainty strongly overweight the ones of strength.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1596 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.972 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...een complete and correct. However, just few information is given in the text and th...
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Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little information'.
Suggestion: little information
...een complete and correct. However, just few information is given in the text and the points of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1246105919 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94580203572 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557632398754 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6116226874 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.545454545 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1818181818 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3636363636 5.70786347227 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.058038638501 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.023272850345 0.0743258471296 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0239891145743 0.0701772020484 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.037353200198 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00986400982933 0.0628817314937 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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