The problem of poor teacher performance that has plagued the state's public school systems is bound to become a good deal less serious in the future. The state has initiated comprehensive guidelines that oblige teachers to complete a number of required credits in education and educational psychology at the graduate level before being certified. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author concludes that the problem of poor teacher performance will result in a positive outcome in future. He based his conclusion on the fact that the state has come up with proper guidelines that force teachers to complete graduate-level courses in education and educational psychology before being certified. This conclusion, however, rests on three unfounded assumptions that if not properly evaluated, substantially weakens the persuasiveness of the author's argument.
First, the author assumes that the issue of poor teacher performance is as a result of the incompetence of teachers in education and educational psychology-related activities. This might not be the case as a teacher's performance could also be affected by other contributing factors. For instance, the very large class size which is rife in the state public schools could affect a teacher's performance. Even when a teacher is very vast in educational psychology, a large class size hampers such a teacher's performance. Also, the lack of proper teaching aids and facilities, which is again evident in the state public school is another factor that affects a teacher's performance. If either of the above assumptions proves true, then the author's argument is intangible.
Second, the author presumes that the initiated guidelines will be comprehensive enough not to condone malpractices and other illegal acts that may jeopardise the need for certification. Perhaps, most of the teachers might decide to contract the certification exercise to their other colleagues, who will do it in proxy, thereby scoring very high and defeating the purpose of the exam. It might also be the case that the examination is not standard enough and will just be a repeat of past questions which will not test the teacher's ability. If the author can, without prejudice, ascertain the standard of the guideline created, this will help to improve the persuasiveness of the argument.
Lastly, the author assumes that the teachers will accept to follow the stated guidelines for taking a graduate-level course. Maybe, many of the teachers are not convinced enough of the need to take the required credit courses and will instead ought for teaching jobs in other states where such guidelines are not in place. It might also be the case that the teachers cannot afford the fees and also would not borrow to the courses since they are not overly convinced to do so. If this is the case, then the author's conclusion is substantially flawed and does not hold water.
In conclusion, it might be true that taking graduate-level courses in education and educational psychology will improve a teacher's performance. However, the author's conclusion, as it stands now, is flawed. Hence more pieces of evidence need to be provided to make the argument more persuasive.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2319 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.142 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.978 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.622 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...mance will result in a positive outcome in future. He based his conclusion on the fact th...
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Line 1, column 460, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ially weakens the persuasiveness of the authors argument. First, the author assumes ...
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Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...vities. This might not be the case as a teachers performance could also be affected by o...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...the state public schools could affect a teachers performance. Even when a teacher is ver...
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Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...logy, a large class size hampers such a teachers performance. Also, the lack of proper t...
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Line 3, column 657, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...school is another factor that affects a teachers performance. If either of the above ass...
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Line 3, column 736, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...above assumptions proves true, then the authors argument is intangible. Second, the ...
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Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
... past questions which will not test the teachers ability. If the author can, without pre...
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Line 7, column 508, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to do so. If this is the case, then the authors conclusion is substantially flawed and ...
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Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...d educational psychology will improve a teachers performance. However, the authors concl...
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Line 9, column 158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ve a teachers performance. However, the authors conclusion, as it stands now, is flawed...
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Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...onclusion, as it stands now, is flawed. Hence more pieces of evidence need to be prov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25055432373 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04370874259 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450110864745 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1226556948 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.4 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216275866219 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741614971933 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060971813683 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126667731631 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667130798217 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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