Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Being a young adult comes with varying challenges. At this stage of life, a young man will be bothered about how to make a mark. As a result, some young adults prefer to be independent early enough while others prefer to be with their families for a longer duration. In my opinion, it is better to be independent of his parents as soon as possible because this makes available a broader range of learning, creates room to try out several things and develops self-control.
First, it is a good option for young adults to be independent early enough because this will allow them to learn more. The period of being a young adult is a period of learning, and that should be the priority. For example, the former president of Nigeria, Goodluck Jonathan, left his parents when he was a teenager. This allowed him to learn from a broader range of people and not be limited to lessons from his parents. As a result, he was able to demonstrate great skill in several fields. Imagine a young adult who is caged by his parents and gets everything done by his parents, such a person, will have a limited idea of how things work in the real world. Hence, it is of great value to be independent of parents at an early stage.
Furthermore, a young man dependent on his parents will not be free to experiment with several opportunities. His parents will always dictate the direction and pace at which he is to go. This is very detrimental, and the man will not be able to take hold of opportunities. For instance, when I was staying with my parents in the early 2000s, I had the mind of becoming a musician because of my love for music. But my parents would not leave me to visit musical gigs where I can improve myself. Because of this, my passion for music withered as I could not develop myself as I wish. However, for an independent young man, this will not be the case. He will be able to schedule his time suitably to get things done and become a well-rounded individual.
Finally, of course, some might argue that early independence from parents will expose the young adult to social vices which will impact him negatively. This is not the case as exposure to social vices is not a function of independence from parents. A young adult should be able to distinguish between what is right and wrong and be careful enough to limit what he is exposed to despite being independent. This act of self-control comes with knowledge gained from independence. Take, for example, a man who has been with his parents for so long and is used to getting all his demands. When such a man is finally left alone, he will want things to continue the same way and will, therefore, look for means to get all he wants. However, a young adult who has been independent early enough would have learnt self-control and how to prioritize his demands.
In conclusion, early independence is beneficial to young adults. This will help them to grow out of their parents’ shell and give them the avenue to harness opportunities. Also, they become self-restraint which is advantageous for societal existence. I wish that society can encourage its youths to take hold of the several advantages that lies in being independent of parents as soon as possible.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2656.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62717770035 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70508295749 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2646502259 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76666666667 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25386856844 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799964262625 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649798326779 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17317579622 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639642995919 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2656.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62717770035 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70508295749 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2646502259 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76666666667 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25386856844 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799964262625 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649798326779 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17317579622 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639642995919 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.