the purpose of higher education is to prepare students for the future, but Classen students are at a serious disadvantage in the competition for post-college employment due to the University's burden-some breadth requirements. Classen's job plac

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the purpose of higher education is to prepare students for the future, but Classen students are at a serious disadvantage in the competition for post-college employment due to the University's burden-some breadth requirements. Classen's job placement rate is substantially lower than placement rates of many top-ranked schools. Classen students would be more attractive to employers if they had more time to take advanced courses in their specialty, rather than being required to spend fifteen percecnt of their time at Classen taking courses outside their subject area. We demand, therefore, that the University abandon or drastically cut bac on its breadth requirements.

Question authority. Only by questioning accepted wisdom can we advance our understanding of the world.

Wisdom is a fusion of both knowledge and experience, it is the heritage of our ancestors, which describes the evolution of humanity throughout history. Constantly, wisdom is a set of familiar rules, which were agreed upon by the majority. Although wisdom is considered as powerful, valuable and indispensable tool, it is not only questionable but also vulnerable to mistakes, as it is human made. So, I strongly agree with the suggestion, that everything in our world is questionable. Every single information in this world must undergo questioning, to evolve, because of the following three reasons.

Firstly, there are some scientific facts, that if were not to be questioned, we would have lived in the dark age by now. One of these facts, was the flatness of Earth. While most of the astrologists of the medieval era believed that our planet is flat, it was discovered by chance, when Portuguese ships from the west were searching for alternative sea-lanes to reach India. Even though it was pragmatically proven yet not popular, most of the population did not believe the fact. Despite being obvious in front of their eyes, just because it is not familiar. Shockingly, most of these people were considered wise by the common folk, who had done ingenious scientific experiences and breakthroughs. On the other hand, iconoclasts, who have been always in doubt, have questioned this ignored fact and came to conclusion themselves, that the Earth has always been rather round than flat. If not for those, who challenged wisdom, we would have lived within a community, that still believes in the monotony of the Earth.

Theology is considered as the base of culture and science in communities. In our world, there are hundreds of religions. Most of the followers were born finding themselves, for instance a monkey-god worshipper. Defying all logical facts, that a monkey could not create a smarter being, neglecting that monkey is an animal, believing in a monkey and worshipping it, were all out of obeying wisdom, which is considered as a folly. Thus, every child should be taught to question everything around him -starting from the early age -and try to analyze facts to obtain the truth. As it is essential for humanity to progress.

Another example of questioning wisdom is the relativity theory of Einstein. If he did blindly believe the theories of the famous Newton, a whole science of quantum physics would have never been existed. He only questioned, what was considered by everyone a wisdom, proved its falseness and even invented a new-whole science based on the opposite idea. So, questioning wisdom in this case, contributed directly to the evolution of science and thus the world.

Certainly, many consider questioning wisdom as forbidden or may be as an act of treason. This will lead only to imprison the mind of an individual in a chain of traditional concepts, where any prospect for innovation is executed. Another important factor is the familiarity of the idea, being strange, opposite and alone fighting against everyone to prove something that might be wrong, requires a lot of energy. Despite that, there are names in our history that challenged the common fact and proved its mendacity. Thus, questioning wisdom can contribute to the progress of our world.

The author suggests that breadth of the Classen university is a burden, as it consumes the budget without benefiting students, whom are in deep need of specialty courses instead of courses that are not in their specialty, in order to get hired after graduation. This claim is completely obscure due to the following four reasons.

Firstly, the assumption of expanding the university at the cost of not attending courses of some specialities is ambiguous, as definitely some subject courses will not be as a financial burden due to the availability of professors, venues and laboratories. Thus, the author missed an important clue, which is the identification that either university expansion will take the funds of specific courses.

Secondly, comparing financial costs to time costs is illogical. It is more like comparing spending 100$ for a lunch or sleeping for an hour. It is essential for this claim to be true to mention other drawbacks in the universities, such as laboratories of low quality or the need of hiring well-reputed professors. The author is stating the need of time resource, so students are able to study advanced courses, which is completely out of the scope of expanding the university, unless students are going to work and waste their time in it, which is not mentioned.

Thirdly, it is undeniable that Classen university has a problem, that its graduates cannot find jobs easily. Though this problem is not related to changing a study-plan or determining the courses in each speciality. Furthermore, if the expansion of the university would affect such courses, the author would have mentioned its modality. He could possibly mention that the university shall invest its time planning for specialised courses for its students rather than expanding the building, which is not mentioned. Thus, the author missed the main possible claim, which is the university prioritising expansion over improving curriculums.

Furthermore, courses outside of subject area is essential. For instance, a software engineer, who has no idea of project management, will not be able to manage a time-critical project. Unlike another, who has a course outside his speciality about such subject, which will be considered as a plus during any interview. Therefore, this claim also is too general to be taken into account. Instead, the author should have mentioned these worthless courses, that make students waste their times.

Finally, the claim has mainly four flaws, it has a vague claim that the breadth of the university is affecting the attendance of students to certain courses, it is comparing money with time, which is uncomprehending, it ignored explicit claims such as the ignorance of Classen university to manage the study-plan and finally assumed too generally that all non-specialized courses are a mere waste of time.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, as for, for instance, of course, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 68.0 19.6327345309 346% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 37.0 13.6137724551 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 28.8173652695 260% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 124.0 55.5748502994 223% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 5268.0 2260.96107784 233% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 1010.0 441.139720559 229% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21584158416 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.63741937097 4.56307096286 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95430762378 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 467.0 204.123752495 229% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462376237624 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1632.6 705.55239521 231% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 4.96107784431 484% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 2.70958083832 517% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 19.7664670659 243% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.1868222767 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0416666667 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 5.15768463074 233% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 8.20758483034 256% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122054413461 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0249193636545 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371307649028 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522179151635 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427955234686 0.0628817314937 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 253.0 98.500998004 257% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 49 15
No. of Words: 1010 350
No. of Characters: 5070 1500
No. of Different Words: 446 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.637 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.843 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 370 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 299 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 216 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 152 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.612 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.367 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.49 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.211 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 12 5