In the given letter to the editor, the owner of a store has strictly focused on the steady decrease in the number of shoppers in Central Plaza. Per him, skateboarding has seen a dramatic increase in its popularity. Also, the author states that all the Central Plaza store owners have deduced that the increase in the skateboard users in the plaza has resulted in the decrease in their businesses. Apart from this, vandalism and amount of litter have seen as a gradual increase. People have started neglecting cleanliness and are now more inclined towards damaging the property of the Central Plaza. The author hastily concludes that skateboarding in the plaza should be prohibited so as to revert the business in the Central Plaza to its previously high levels. However, the author fails to mention several key factors to bolster his/her argument. Hence, the argument can be considered unwarranted.
Firstly, the author claims that the decrease in the business of the Central Plaza stores is due to the increase in skateboard users in the Plaza. The author fails to highlight that the decrease in the business can be due to various other reasons, namely, deterioration in the quality of goods being sold at the Central Plaza, may be the location of the Plaza is not very approachable and people find it difficult to travel so far for shopping.
It is also possible that the collection in the stores in Central Plaza is outdated and not in pace with that of other shopping malls in the city. Another reason for a decline in the business can be the establishment of new shopping Plazas in the city that offers much more discounts and offers to the local people as a marketing strategy for survival in the competition.
Secondly, the author claims that cleanliness has declined and vandalism has increased. The declination in the cleanliness standards can be possibly due to negligence on behalf of cleaning staff. The cleaning staff should be summoned to ensure hygienic conditions in the central plaza.
Furthermore, the central plaza is a public property and being used unanimously by the entire city, it is mandatory to have a well-established maintenance body to look after the vandalism caused by the visitors. It is possible that acute vandalism was a routine affair and the maintenance staff is not doing its duty sincerely. They should be educated to work more regularly to amend the damage caused to the property. This, in turn, can be another reason why the number of shoppers has decreased in the Central Plaza.
In conclusion, the author’s claim is unpersuasive. There is no direct link between the decline in the number of shoppers and an increase in the number of skateboarders. Although the author has tried his best to put forward his argument in the most comprehensive manner, he still fails to address the above-mentioned questions that need to be addressed before we land up to a final conclusion.
Essay evaluation report
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarders in central plaza. If skate boarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2379 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.782 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 682, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...rding in the plaza should be prohibited so as to revert the business in the Central Plaz...
^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore we land up to a final conclusion.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, apart from, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2448.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98574338086 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87946687256 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450101832994 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5406369808 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.272727273 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3181818182 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327890073878 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11062797655 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125575283754 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173541128044 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110835924597 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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