In the given argument, the author states about the prevailing deficiency of Vitamin A amongst the people of a nation named Tagus. The author claims that a new breed of millet has been engineered by an International development organization that has high Vitamin A content. The author also claims that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming this new variety of millet since it is costlier than before. Also, since millet is the staple food in Tagus, the author feels that people will readily adapt to the new variety. The only way to deal with the Vitamin A deficiency problem is to promote the new variety of millet as given in the argument. Well, the author has tried his best to justify the claims given in the argument, but he fails to enlighten the reader with any substantial reasoning. There are umpteen questions that need to be addressed before we can culminate to a solution to the problem proposed above.
First, the author claims that the new breed of millet has been engineered by an International development organization. No where has he mentioned about the credulity of this organization, is this organization solely dedicated to engineering seeds and works for the development of agriculture and farming. How advanced is this organization, how was the new variety of millets made rich in Vitamin A, what level of expertise was involved, who were the scientists working to propose such a lucrative breed of millets? All the questions need a solid understanding and substantial answers.
Second, the author claims that millet is the staple food in Tagus and people will easily adapt to the new variety. Well, this claim definitely lacks rational grounds. It is plausible that the new variety of millets have a different taste or maybe some pungent taste associated with it since the Vitamin A content has been substantially increased. Thus, people are likely to dislike the new taste and move to try new and better things with a more likable taste. They may also be disappointed with the new breed and prefer the low content variety due to its better taste and already acquired habit.
Third, in the above argument, the author has made a statement about combating Vitamin A deficiency amongst the people of Tagus bolstering about the promotion of the new variety of millets as the only way to deal with the problem. Well, the author needs to open up and learn about all the food items that are rich in Vitamin A and promote not only millets but all the Vitamin A rich food varieties. The author needs to focus on steps that can be taken to make people more aware of their health and educate them about the serious hazards Vitamin A deficiency can lead to. People should be encouraged to eat Vitamin A rich food items and the grocery stores can play an important role in this, helping them choose a consummate diet rich in not only Vitamin A, but all sorts of Vitamins and nutrients.
Summarising the above claims made in the argument given, all the claims made by the author stand unwarranted. Deep analysis and substantial justification are required to consider the above claims warranted. The author needs to understand the complexity of the situation and open up to the myriad steps that can be taken to deal with the crisis.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. need to argue this:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. need to ague this:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 559 350
No. of Characters: 2642 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.862 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.726 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.593 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.304 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.358 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
...International development organization. No where has he mentioned about the credul...
^^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the scientists working to propose such a lucrative breed of millets? All the ques...
^^
Line 7, column 711, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...rtant role in this, helping them choose a consummate diet rich in not only Vitamin A, but al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, third, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2700.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 559.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83005366726 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65720704755 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409660107335 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.9 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0330688587 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.391304348 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3043478261 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4347826087 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402479232455 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131056282168 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100969970808 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232417531003 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121484827048 0.0628817314937 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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