A recent sales study indicated that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has
increased by 30 percent over the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city
restaurants that specialize in seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are
two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly
fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more
concern about eating healthily. Therefore, a new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood
will be quite popular and profitable.
The author states that seafood dishes in Bay cities restaurants has increased by 30 percent over the five years and this city has the majority of families are two-income families. Thus, home-cooked males are reduced and would be profitable if a restaurant is established in this city. However, the proposal contains some flaws and will not be accepted if it fails to answer some critical assumption. Moreover, the assumption helps to draw an accurate conclusion and dismisses the untrue assumption.
The first problematic issue is the total customer of the restaurant who consumes food in the Bay city. without a definite number, it is impossible to say the percentage of the customer. Moreover, the location of the restaurant is not properly expressed. If the location is not in the proper area sometimes the profit will vary. Thus, before considering the proposal the location and how many citizens are living vicinity of the area is required.
The second problem is the two-income family in the city has increased does not mean that the citizen of the city will regularly eat the restaurant food. Moreover, seafood consumption is increased but it is difficult to say that a specializing seafood restaurant will be popular. Moreover, in the same restaurant eating the same food over and over again citizen may feel bored. Thus, varity of the food is desired.
The third issue is, the customer is a health concern. Therefore, the proposal does not contain any evidence related to the hygenic condition of the restaurant and the type of food will be served. The seafood may be popular but the evidence shows that they are also health concern and thus possible that the customer may vegetarian.
while the overall hypothesis is quite interesting but by examining various fact, it can be concluded that to validate the proposal required more evidence. The proposal will be accepted if all the weakness already referred are removed and answer all the assumption question
accurately.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1620 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.793 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.941 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...rant who consumes food in the Bay city. without a definite number, it is impossible to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e restaurant is not properly expressed. If the location is not in the proper area ...
^^
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing seafood restaurant will be popular. Moreover, in the same restaurant eating the same...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...le that the customer may vegetarian. while the overall hypothesis is quite interes...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 273, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d and answer all the assumption question accurately.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11656441718 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77188614116 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484662576687 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4354663738 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188116948009 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579141449606 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891336831609 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098230853435 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082688511281 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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