A recent sales study indicated that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has
increased by 30 percent over the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants
that specialize in seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families,
and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than
they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about eating healthily. Therefore, a
new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood will be quite popular and profitable.
The arguer has drawn the conclusion that establishing a new Bay City restaurant that specializes in
seafood would be both profitable as well as popular. The argument relies on two facts as evidence in
support of the claim made. The first is that the consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants
have increased over the past five years, but there are no restaurants in Bay City that specialize in
seafood. The second fact states that the majority of the families in Bay City are two-income families
and the results of a nationwide survey have indicated that two-income families are increasingly
concerned about healthy eating habits and they are eating fewer home-cooked meals. However, the
facts presented by the arguer are insufficient to prove that a new Bay City restaurant specializing in
seafood would be popular and profitable.
The fact that there are no seafood restaurants in Bay City, despite the increase in the consumption of
seafood, does not necessarily mean that a restaurant specializing in seafood would be popular and
profitable. Firstly, the increase in consumption by thirty percent is insignificant in view of the fact that
this has happened over a period of five years. Moreover, if seafood was indeed so popular among the
residents of Bay City, then restaurants specializing in seafood would have come up by now.
Moreover, the restaurants that serve seafood dishes would have diversified into separate restaurants
for serving seafood dishes only, if there was a huge demand for the same. The very fact that these
restaurants are continuing to serve seafood dishes in addition to other dishes prove that these
restaurants are not making much profit from the consumption of seafood.
Additionally, it is likely that the increase in consumption is not only for seafood, but also for the other
dishes being served by popular restaurants. People may be going to these restaurants because they like
their preparation or the ambience. It is highly unlikely that they will stop going to their favorite
restaurants to dine at a new restaurant that serves only seafood. Therefore, the new restaurant will
have to compete with the other restaurants that are already popular in Bay City and which offer other
dishes in addition to seafood dishes. The new restaurant may not be able to make profit unless it is
able to build up a sizeable clientage, which seems unlikely in view of the above mentioned aspects
related to dining in Bay City restaurants.
The arguer fails to provide substantial evidence to prove the relevance of the nationwide survey in the
context of the two-income families residing in Bay City. There is no mention of the percentage of Bay
City families who were a part of this survey. It is likely that the survey included families residing in
big cities and metros and the type of lifestyle that they follow permits them to eat out regularly. It is
quite possible that the families in Bay City are not too keen on eating out as opposed to their
counterparts in bigger cities. Moreover, if the families are health conscious, then they would not like
to eat in a new restaurant as they would doubt the quality of food being served and they would rather
eat at the restaurants where they have been dining in the past. Therefore, the arguer fails to provide a
link between the nationwide survey and the dining habits of the two-income families of Bay City in
order to substantiate his recommendation.
The argument could have been strengthened if both the surveys had provided information related to
the willingness of the Bay City residents to eat seafood. Moreover, the profits earned by a restaurant
depend on the initial investments along with the expenses incurred in the maintenance of the
restaurant. The arguer does not provide information related to such data. Therefore, the argument fails
to convince the reader that a new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood will be profitable and
popular.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 61 15
No. of Words: 658 350
No. of Characters: 3242 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.065 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.798 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 228 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 174 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 83 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.787 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.381 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.344 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.228 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.799 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 42 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Seafood
...y City restaurant that specializes in seafood would be both profitable as well as pop...
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Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...s in seafood would be both profitable as well as popular. The argument relies on two fac...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Support
...nt relies on two facts as evidence in support of the claim made. The first is that th...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Seafood
...urants in Bay City that specialize in seafood. The second fact states that the majori...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Concerned
... two-income families are increasingly concerned about healthy eating habits and they ar...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Seafood
...w Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood would be popular and profitable. The ...
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Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Profitable
...izing in seafood would be popular and profitable. Firstly, the increase in consumption b...
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Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...nsignificant in view of the fact that this has happened over a period of five year...
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Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Residents
...afood was indeed so popular among the residents of Bay City, then restaurants specializ...
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Line 31, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...diversified into separate restaurants for serving seafood dishes only, if there w...
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Line 35, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Restaurants
...tion to other dishes prove that these restaurants are not making much profit from the con...
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Line 39, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dishes
...y for seafood, but also for the other dishes being served by popular restaurants. Pe...
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Line 41, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Their
...o these restaurants because they like their preparation or the ambience. It is high...
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Line 43, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Restaurants
...hey will stop going to their favorite restaurants to dine at a new restaurant that serves...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 47, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dishes
...lar in Bay City and which offer other dishes in addition to seafood dishes. The new ...
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Line 51, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Related
...n view of the above mentioned aspects related to dining in Bay City restaurants. Th...
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Line 55, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Context
...vance of the nationwide survey in the context of the two-income families residing in ...
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Line 59, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Big
... survey included families residing in big cities and metros and the type of lifes...
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Line 63, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Counterparts
...een on eating out as opposed to their counterparts in bigger cities. Moreover, if the fami...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 67, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Eat
...od being served and they would rather eat at the restaurants where they have been...
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Line 71, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Order
...he two-income families of Bay City in order to substantiate his recommendation. T...
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Line 75, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...s had provided information related to the willingness of the Bay City residents t...
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Line 79, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Restaurant
...es incurred in the maintenance of the restaurant. The arguer does not provide informatio...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 83, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Popular
...ing in seafood will be profitable and popular.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 55.5748502994 178% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3408.0 2260.96107784 151% => OK
No of words: 658.0 441.139720559 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17933130699 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06473204393 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86180220549 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.363221884498 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1041.3 705.55239521 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5915958968 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.32 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.32 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 41.0 5.15768463074 795% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351140530345 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126015401988 0.0743258471296 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108991341901 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105392080858 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906393711363 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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