"A recent study of Dura-Socks customers suggests that our company is wasting the money it spends on its patented Endure manufacturing process, which ensures that our socks are strong enough to last for two years. We have always advertised our use of the Endure process, but the new study shows that despite the socks' durability, our customers, on average, actually purchase new Dura-Socks every three months. Furthermore, customers surveyed in our largest market — northeastern United States cities — say that they most value Dura-Socks' stylish appearance and availability in many colors. These findings suggest that we can increase our profits by discontinuing use of the Endure manufacturing process."
The speaker unreasonably concludes that profits can be increased just by ending the use endure manufacturing process.The state given is insubstantial and cannot be presumed to be supporting the argument.Unless,the speaker provides all the detailed information with statistical data and brief analysis with relative description this can't be a cogent argument.
Firstly,the speaker states that making a fail statement by recent study since there is no information or statistical data of the study which can give us a clear idea of customers and the company.Why does he mentions as wasting of money?He also states that the socks are strong enough to last for two years does that mean the customers actually used for so long if so that data is missing to analyse this statement.
Secondly,there was no clear information as what kind of advertisement they did for endure process?if they did was it noticed by customers as it mentions about the new study the customers buy new one's for every three months.So this nullifies that socks didn't last longer than three months.This study could have been more eloquent if the data was provided more clearly about the customers and the average refers to how many number of people it was calculated.Was there any offers during this period which made people buy although the socks last for a long timer such information is needed.
Thirdly,The survey of customers provides the information that they value dura-socks stylish appearance and availablity in many colours.Is this the reason why people buy for every three months just to change the colours for better appearence then in this case if they large varities it would definitely long for many years.The speaker also fails to provide the data as what age groups were surveyed if it was only under people who is young prefer colours and fashion where as old people don't really bother about stylish appearance.There was no detailed data as the surveys were considered before and after the endure manufacturing process.
In the conclusion,as there was no clear evidence to support the argument about the surveys was not detailed clearly with relevant data and information about the increase in profits etc.Henceforth,the argument further can't be deemed to be persuasive.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1868 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.852 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.551 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.127 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.459 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.823 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ng the use endure manufacturing process.The state given is insubstantial and cannot...
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Unless
... presumed to be supporting the argument.Unless,the speaker provides all the detailed i...
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Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...med to be supporting the argument.Unless,the speaker provides all the detailed infor...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...analysis with relative description this cant be a cogent argument. Firstly,the sp...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...is cant be a cogent argument. Firstly,the speaker states that making a fail state...
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Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Why
...clear idea of customers and the company.Why does he mentions as wasting of money?He...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mention'?
Suggestion: mention
...f customers and the company.Why does he mentions as wasting of money?He also states that...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mention'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: mention
...f customers and the company.Why does he mentions as wasting of money?He also states that...
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Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: He
...hy does he mentions as wasting of money?He also states that the socks are strong e...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...g to analyse this statement. Secondly,there was no clear information as what kind o...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ers buy new ones for every three months.So this nullifies that socks didnt last lo...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ree months.So this nullifies that socks didnt last longer than three months.This stud...
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Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: This
...cks didnt last longer than three months.This study could have been more eloquent if ...
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Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...customers and the average refers to how many number of people it was calculated.Was there a...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Was
...many number of people it was calculated.Was there any offers during this period whi...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , The
...r such information is needed. Thirdly,The survey of customers provides the inform...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Is
...earance and availablity in many colours.Is this the reason why people buy for ever...
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Suggestion: The
...it would definitely long for many years.The speaker also fails to provide the data ...
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Line 7, column 467, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...who is young prefer colours and fashion where as old people dont really bother about sty...
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Line 7, column 487, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...colours and fashion where as old people dont really bother about stylish appearance....
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Line 7, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
... really bother about stylish appearance.There was no detailed data as the surveys wer...
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Line 7, column 606, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...urveys were considered before and after the endure manufacturing process. In the conclu...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...ufacturing process. In the conclusion,as there was no clear evidence to support ...
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Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Henceforth
...ation about the increase in profits etc.Henceforth,the argument further cant be deemed to ...
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Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...t the increase in profits etc.Henceforth,the argument further cant be deemed to be p...
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Line 9, column 218, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...its etc.Henceforth,the argument further cant be deemed to be persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22191780822 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98801509204 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512328767123 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 73.0 22.8473053892 320% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.409694965 57.8364921388 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 381.2 119.503703932 319% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.0 23.324526521 313% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.4 5.70786347227 357% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169398247658 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952637651202 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743963603179 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952637651202 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743963603179 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.7 14.3799401198 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.62 48.3550499002 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 12.197005988 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.18 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.32208582834 129% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 12.3882235529 246% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.2 11.1389221557 280% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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