According to an independent poll of 200 charitable organizations, overall donations of money to nonprofit groups increased last year, but educational institutions did not fare as well as other organizations. Donations to international aid groups increased the most (30 percent), followed by donations to environmental groups (23 percent), whereas donations to educational institutions actually decreased slightly (3 percent). Meanwhile, all of the major economical indicators suggest that consumer spending is higher than average this year, showing that potential donors have ample disposable income. Therefore, the clearest explanation for the decline in donations to educational institutions is that people actually value education less than they did in the past.
The speaker unreasonably concludes that decline in donations to the educational institutions is because people don't value education when compared in the past.This statement is not eloquent and purely irrational.Unless,there is no proper explanation is provided with relevant examples and statistics this argument can't be a cogent argument.
Firstly,The speaker mentions about the over all donations of money to nonprofit groups is increased over the earlier year but failed to state the real donation amount in both the years.The poll of 200 charitable organizations was taken but the statistical data of the polls is missing.On what basis did he conclude that education institutions did not do better as compared with the other organizations however,he also failed to state what the other organizations refer to?
Secondly,The donations to international aid groups increasing to 30 percent and also the enviromental groups to 23 percent doesn't provide an adequate statistical data to support the argument.Even the educational institutions decreasing percentage is calculated on what basis?What if the previous years had almost same percentage over all which is not mentioned.Although it is decreased by the previous year the actual percentage can be compared only if the before once is provided.
Thirdly,The economic indicators suggesting the consumer spending is higher than average of the year is not evidently proven in the argument.How can he conclude that the donors are potential enough and have ample disposable income?There might be a chance that they are just making their market spread more and publicize to people by doing such donations.What if some people who don't like to enjoy luxuries instead spend their money by donations.Henceforth,it is very uncertain to come to conclusion as donors have disposable income.
In the conclusion,There is no stated evidence to prove that the decline of donations to educational institutions is less because people value education substantially low when compared with the past.As the speaker failed to provide most empirical evidence to rationalize the evidence of the argument. A significant amount of more data could help us clearly support the reason behind the decline of donations in particular area.Thus,the argument can't be deemed to be persuasive.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1929 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.13 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.9 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.243 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.834 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ns in particular area.Thus,the argument cant be deemed to be persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59090909091 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4842473131 2.78398813304 125% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534090909091 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 22.8473053892 254% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.335585565 57.8364921388 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 328.0 119.503703932 274% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.6666666667 23.324526521 252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.3333333333 5.70786347227 304% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292360993603 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136692748426 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126575857669 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156186830137 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130945906731 0.0628817314937 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.2 14.3799401198 238% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -4.31 48.3550499002 -9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.197005988 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.03 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.6 8.32208582834 127% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 12.3882235529 246% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.2 11.1389221557 226% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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