It is concluded -that regular dental care is not helpful for preventing tooth decay-the basis that children in suburban areas visit the dentist more than those in Himalayan region and yet they have more tooth decay. However, there are some question that need to be answered to consider this conclusion valid.
A study was conducted on the basis of which conclusions were drawn. However, the validity of the study conducted is missing. The conductor of the study, duration of the observations and the conditions in which it was carried out are not clearly mentioned. For example, the age of the children observed may be different in both the countries thus causing the discrepancies in the result. Also it is solely mentioned that the levels of decay were lower, but there might be a possibility that they are not significantly lower which may change the perspective of the results. The lack of clarity over the validity of the study make the above mentioned explanation invalid.
The given study and the observations also assume that it the conditions in both the regions were same. It may be possible that due to climatic conditions, elevations and other factors the results are varied: which has hardly anything to do with the frequency of the visits to a dentist. In fact, the levels of tooth decay in the children of the United States may be the best that can be achieved given the food and drinks they consume. These facts make a strong point towards the rejection of the idea that regular dental care is not helpful.
It is also mentioned that there is no professional dental care available in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal. It may be possible that the general doctors there are capable of mitigating the damage of the decay without the support of the specialist dental care. It might also be the possibility that the dentists in the United States are not skilled as those in the other region. This would be the reason behind the higher levels of the decay in the United States' children. The given information has no clear mention of these factors and thus concluding that visits to the dentists are ineffective seems invalid.
All the above mentioned facts make a strong case for the fact that the given information is not adequate to conclude that regular dental care is ineffective for preventing tooth decay.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1895 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.761 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.542 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to consider this conclusion valid. A study was conducted on the basis of wh...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ausing the discrepancies in the result. Also it is solely mentioned that the levels ...
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Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...lely mentioned that the levels of decay were lower, but there might be a possibility...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...above mentioned explanation invalid. The given study and the observations als...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... regular dental care is not helpful. It is also mentioned that there is no pr...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... support of the specialist dental care. It might also be the possibility that the ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tists are ineffective seems invalid. All the above mentioned facts make a str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86934673367 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59124051584 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427135678392 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0831041431 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27777777778 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238181736071 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744027455624 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782410089477 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138369484154 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596670936311 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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