All of the countries around the world are trying to improve the life of its residents. At the same time, most of the countries are trying to ensure world peace by strengthening the bonds between other countries. Although military has an important role for such countries, the effect of arts cannot be neglected. A country which encourages arts can help to achieve the common motive of world peace directly or indirectly. Thus the governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Investing in arts has a huge benefit for a country's economy. A good artistic environment translates to increased employment opportunities. Careers like dancer, writer, singer and many more would start to contribute towards a growth in the economy. Not only the individuals indulged in such professions, but also other people will also get employment opportunities. For example, when production of a film begins, everyone -the actors, directors, supporting crew which includes drivers, security personnel and others are able to earn some money and improve their lifestyle. Such small contributions help the country to improve its financial conditions.
Arts can also play a major role in establishing world peace where the military would have a lesser importance. An art of any kind, can connect to individuals which may be related to different background. For example, many actors from India have huge respect in Western and Middle Eastern countries which plays a crucial role strengthening the ties between those countries. These actors can help improving the economies in other countries by playing some roles or shooting in that country, eventually improving the relations between the countries.
Arts is a topic which is of equal importance to a nation as its military. A country having a strong artistic atmosphere has a great culture too. This helps to establish a cultural dominance in the world. General public of any other country recognizes their own as well as other countries on the basis of their culture. The development of a culture is vastly influenced by the art and craft the country encourages. A culturally diverse country is likely to be more successful than the country which is biased towards its military.
These points make a strong case for the fact that arts are equally important for a country as is its military. Hence, governments should invest in the arts as they do in the military.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13098236776 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88096688273 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503778337531 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9981621039 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.5652173913 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13043478261 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208954588368 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853803091472 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.181555379262 0.0758088955206 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14991015565 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130330956964 0.0667264976115 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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