A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per d

The claim made by the author solely based on one factor- asian eat 20 grams of soy per day and Americans do not, hence latter have lot of fatigue and depressions. The one point reason gives rise to so many different questions: What are the causes of the depression? Were the study unbiased? What are the side effects of soy?

Firstly, depression happens because of many different factors like work stress, bad lifestyle, environment et cetera. There is not mention of any of these factors between the asians and the Americans which does not fully justify the soy solution. May be, because of North American being the most developed nation has so much pressure and stress on individuals to excel in their life when compare to asian and does result in health problems. The Many ecological and geological effects are to be considered before coming to a conclusion.

Secondly, we are not aware of the whether the sample set taken for study is identical or not. May be, the whole test is biased due to inconsistency of the study set. there is no concrete number on which the study was conducted, it might be a small set which is so less reliable and can mislead us to a completely opposite observation. The study might be a calumny by the soy manufactures so as to promote their product in North America. They might have stated the exact opposite in the Asia to grab attention of the public.

Thirdly, does soy always do good to the person who consumes it? Does it have any side effects? does some set of people be allergic to the product so that it might act in the reverse way and aggrandise the depression? There was no mention of any of the disadvantages, hence we do not have a lucid understanding of it. It can be a possibility that many other products might reduce depression and have very less side effects as of soy.

Hence I want to conclude that, with all the above unanswered questions about many aspects of the statement provided by the author. It is better to have a conclusion only after looking into every possible angle of the solution before recommending it to the public.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63978494624 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62919717142 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7320248788 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1044163237 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334248897821 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319980178794 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577057865194 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424511693377 0.0628817314937 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1677 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.508 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.545 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.41 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5