The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government , industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The author claims that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for any leadership in any fields like government and industrry is by inculcating a sense of cooperation but not competition. Some people might consider that competition will be better way as it might force people to bring their best and work for the fullest. However, I would like to agree with the author that cooperation will be more fruitful and in the subsequent paragraphs will provide explanation of why I choose this side.
Firstly, mankind evolved over the years by sharing their knowledge about many discoveries or inventions with others. Starting from invention of fire to the creation of internet, we have shared all our achievements with fellow communities for the development. If the earlier humans, were reluctant to share their discoveries we would not have come this far. Hence, the competitive sense will not help in the overall growth of the society as the thoughts and ideas will be confined to an individual.
Furthermore, in any field, the tasks or assignments are done by a group of employees who are termed as a team and so being a good team member always has to do with being cooperative. Today's technology gaints like Google, Amazon have more than few thousand and even more than hundred thousand employees working under the same firm. These gaints are trying to induce a healthy environment for people to share and grow. Moreover, many co-working areas are established for the new start-ups to mingle with each other and bolster their products. Hence, in any field of endevours we need to be more cooperative than competitive.
Finally, instilling the sense of competition upon young people might have some disadvantages. Due to the immense competition, the next generation might face a lot of stress and pressure in all aspects of their life. Which will inturn effect their physical and mental growth. People who are not able to handle this pressure might fall apart and may lead to ending their career, even worse, ending their life in the middle.
Conclusion, there are some potentional advantages of being competitive which should not be overshadowed. But, those benefits of competition does not overrule the benefits of cooperation. Thus, I want to conclude that I agree with the author's claim of "cooperation before competition".
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...re than few thousand and even more than hundred thousand employees working under the sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10824742268 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91864118418 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548969072165 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4090336116 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.315789474 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234510312838 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692187848733 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119302959662 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119204214454 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118878595124 0.0667264976115 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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