"In a recent telephone survey of automobile factory workers, older employees were less likely to report that having a supervisor present increases their productivity. Among workers aged 18 to 29, 27 percent said that they are more productive in the presence of their immediate supervisor, compared to 12 percent for those aged 30 or over, and only 8 percent for those aged 50 or over. Clearly, if our printing company hires mainly older employees, we will increase productivity and save money because of the reduced need for supervisors. "
Author states that if the printing company hires mainly older employees, it will increase their productivity and it will save money because the need of supervisors will be less, to draw such a conculsion the author takes the base of a telephone survey of a automobile factory workers in which it was found that older employees were less likely to report that having a supervisor present increases their productivity. It was found that workers among the age of 18 to 29, 27 percent said that they are more productive in the presence of their immediate supervisor, compared to 12 percent for those aged 30 or over, and only 8 percent for those aged 50 or over.
The conculsion drawn by the author is completly absurd, full of flaws and is based on lot of assumptions.
Firstly,the author has assumed that the productivity of both the young people and the old aged people are same, which is not true since if the work involved any kind of labour work then clearly young people will be more effective.For instance if the dilivery work of the printed material from one place to another is given to an old man he will not be as effective as a young man. Undoubtedly in a printing company there must be different work for which old people will not be suitable and if such works are given to them the productivity will obiviouly decrease.
The survey which was the base of the argument can also be not trusted compeletly as it was done by the workers of an automobile factory and not a printing company, since what applies for automobile company cannot be true for a printing company. It is highly possible that people in a printing company regardless of the age need a supervisor to increase their productivity. Another possiblity is that in a printing company old people need a supervisor to increase their productivity in against the young people depending on the work they are given, Hence if any case is taken into consideration then the productivity will go down. In addition to this assuming the survey to be true, we can clearly see that only 27 percent said that their productivity increase when they are in the presence of their immediate supervisor while the rest 73 percent agreed that their prodcutivity remains the same depsite the absence of supervisior.
Clearly one cannot deny the fact that to run a company succesfully we need both young enuthusiam and old experience in a balanced ratio, absence of any will lead to decrase profits and productivity and hence the idea pitched by the author to hire mainly older employees can backfire and their company can suffer losses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, thus, while, for instance, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 450.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76222222222 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72293324048 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422222222222 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 22.8473053892 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.1207573836 57.8364921388 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 214.3 119.503703932 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 45.0 23.324526521 193% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296474857947 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126890930979 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111670127122 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158828588936 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179362717727 0.0628817314937 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.5 14.3799401198 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.3550499002 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 12.197005988 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.22 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 11.1389221557 180% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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