The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system, a standard, a set of ideas-not to prepare them for a specific job
Who imparts education? It is not necessary that a child becomes educated by going to school. Students learn from their parents, their friends and the environment in which they live in addition to their teachers who teach them at school. When we say that a person is an educated individual, it does not mean that he has a host of degrees; rather it means that apart from degrees he is also aware of the social norms and standards that are acceptable for co-existence in society. This aspect of education has to be provided either by the school curriculum or the environment in which a student is carrying out the learning process. The purpose of education cannot be restricted to preparing students for a specific job as this would bring down the standards of society as a whole. Everyone would be well-trained for the career that he is pursuing, but no one will be educated enough to conform to the standards laid down by society for peaceful co-existence in total harmony so as to allow the society to progress in the positive direction.
Is education required for preparing students for a specific job? If the answer to this questions is 'Yes', then this means that there should be no requirement of the heirs of business tycoons and monarchy to go to regular schools. They can just be trained for handling their parental business or monarchy and there is no need for them to acquire the form of education that all other children of their age do. Additionally, there should be no need for their parents to imbibe in them the knowledge that leads to their development as well-educated individuals. On the contrary, affluent people hire personal groomers and send their children to finishing schools, so that they learn that extra bit which their management studies or other forms of higher studies will not be able to teach. Moreover, they also attend regular classes like all other students because the purpose of education is to provide the students with a set of ideas that will prepare them for life in general and not just a specific job.
It is true that you need specific training for succeeding in a specific career. For instance, you need to pursue medical studies to become a doctor and you have to study in a management college to become a successful business manager. However, the basic education that is provided before these higher studies should be the same for everyone and it should be job-independent so as to bring the citizens of a country to a common standard. As far as the job specific education like medical studies is concerned, there should be an endeavor to prepare the curriculum matter in such a way that the students gain knowledge that will help them to become good doctors who conform to a given standard with an ideal set of thoughts rather than churning out doctors who are experts in the field of medicine, but are totally ignorant about the environment around them.
Education is required to enlighten a person and change his entire thought process by making him aware of all the aspects of life so that he is well-prepared to tackle any kind of situation. This will be possible only if he is aware of the various aspects that form a part of the educational curriculum including other issues that he can learn through his parents, teachers or friends. Training a student for a specific job only would be an entire waste of time and effort as he would be unsuitable for the other necessities of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 974, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... peaceful co-existence in total harmony so as to allow the society to progress in the po...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ts for a specific job? If the answer to this questions is Yes, then this means that ...
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Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...eryone and it should be job-independent so as to bring the citizens of a country to a co...
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Line 7, column 756, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...oughts rather than churning out doctors who are experts in the field of medicine, but a...
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Line 7, column 829, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
Suggestion: the surrounding environment
...edicine, but are totally ignorant about the environment around them. Education is required to enlighte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, apart from, as to, for instance, in addition, in general, kind of, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2852.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 600.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75333333333 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68109430395 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421666666667 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.6658333291 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.6 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43706108609 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154121271351 0.0831039109588 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123024384441 0.0758088955206 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280003884363 0.150359130593 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767314503214 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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