Recently Bagel Mania replaced sugar with saccharin, a sugar substitute, throughout its bakeries in the Northeast areas of the USA. Contrary to initial expectations, this change did not have a adverse impact on our customer's preferences. So far, only 10 percent of our customers have grumbled about this change suggesting that an average of 90 customers out 100 have no issues with the use of saccharin in our baked products. Since our customers have not voiced great concern about the use of saccharin instead of sugar, it is evident that we should implement this change in all the branches of Bagel Mania bakeries in rest of the country.
The manager of Bagel Mania Bakery states the replcement of sugar with saccharin should be implemented in all the branches as 90 out of 100 have no issues with this replacement. I think the manager has overlooked many other factors and haven't provided necessary reasons in making the decison. The statement needs to be scrutinized to get a proper result.
First, the reason for the shift from sugar to saccharin is not delineated. Was the change made for cost cutting point of view or was it undertaken keeping health benefits as priority or some other reason. Had the author provided the reason for the replacemnet of sugar, one could have scrutinized thoroughly.
Second, the manager states that only 10 percent have complained about the change and the rest 90 out of 100 haveno issues. The number of people that were surveyed are quite small. In a country like USA,making assumptions on account of 100 people is not quite convincing. The manager need to take a survey of atleast 1000 customers to get the actual feedback. Also, it is quite possible that the people who didn't opposed the change are shy to provide their actual opinion and just given the opinion for the sake of giving it.
Third, the decision to implement this change in all of the branches is also based on wea assumption. The manager has overlooked the factors such as the weather of different regions, food preference of diffrent people, etc. The manger assumes that people living in rest of the country will have same opinion that of people living in Northeastern areas.
So to end with, the mannager's decion is based on many weak assumptions and he has made a hasty decision. By overlooking many factors and making the decision based on few 100 people is not convincing for the replacement of sugar with saccharin. The manager needs to provide more statistical data needs to take into consideration different aspects while making such decision.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1563 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.736 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.55 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , making
...d are quite small. In a country like USA,making assumptions on account of 100 people is...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...t is quite possible that the people who didnt opposed the change are shy to provide t...
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Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...he decision to implement this change in all of the branches is also based on wea assumptio...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent people, etc. The manger assumes that people living in rest of the country wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, so, third, while, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 327.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90214067278 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6236714293 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519877675841 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8173855111 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.2941176471 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181227217457 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538775081162 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568691409877 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951490454095 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282474497326 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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