Recently butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States This change however has had little impact on our customers In fact only about 2 percent of customers have complained indicating tha

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"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."

The author concludes that either the customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term "butter" to refer to either butter or margarine". In order to support his conclusion, he has cited various evidences. Although, these evidences appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. Hence, in order to make the argument more sound, author need to address the following especific evidences.

First and foremost, the author is presenting that only two percent of customers have complained. Perhaps, this might not be the case, for example, when I go to the restaurant, even if I find the restaurant not good at food and qualilty, I simplly don't complain. Whatever, at last I say thank you for your wonderful service and food. This may be the case, the data that shows only two percent people have complained, maynot ensure that only two percent of the customers were unhappy. Perhaps, there were more than fifty percent of people who were unhappy but they simply didn't expressed. If the case is this, then the conclusion formulated baseed on this evidence might go unwarranted.

Second of all, the author is using the words many servers, how much this mean? It is quiet vague. Many simply means more than two, the author has not provided the statistics required. There might be almost all servers have reported or just three of them have reported, these both case might be there. Perhaps there were hundred of servers and just three out of them have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not cmplain when they are given margarine insead. In this case, the author's conclusion base on the evidence doesn't hold water.

Third of all, the author has not presented the statistical data of the number of customers visited after and before the change. Perhaps, the number of customers are decreasing knowing the use of margarine, perhaps they knew it and quit their habit to go restaurant. If this is the case, then the author's concluion might not be logical.

In sum, if the author has presented the especific evidences such as, statistical data of the servers, number of customers before and after the change, this argument might be more persuasive. The conclusion made by the author based on his evidences, I find this argument is not persuasive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a hundred
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, third, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96930946292 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68732851578 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2217985419 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5238095238 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156791115736 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482137213443 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496264602838 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905998475289 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363792605377 0.0628817314937 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1858 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.716 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.443 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.217 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5