The manager of Honey Bun Bakery suggest the recent replacement of sugar with aspartame to all the branches in the country. He has based the stament on assumptions of customers reviews. However, the manager must also consider alternate explanations which could prove his statements wrong.
First of all, the manager hasn't stated the cause of the replacement of sugar with aspartame. Was it because of increased costs of sugar or quality issues? It can so happen that the cost of aspartame exceeds the cost of sugar and making the replacement would cost Honey Bun Bakery a higher production cost. In such a case the replacement should not be advised. Similarly the health effects of aspartame with comparison to sugar must also be made. Because if the ill effects of aspartame is higher the manager must not adopt the use of aspartame in the products as this could lose them patreons of the bakery.
Secondly, the manager has stated that only 5 percent of people have complained about this change. It could have an alternate explanation that only 5 percent people noticed the change and the rest didn't notice the change or were hesitant to complain. In such a case, the manager's claim can be refuted that 95 percent of people have no problem with the replacement.
Thus a survey of people must be conducted to compare the products made with aspartame with that of sugar. It would ascertain the fact whether the customers would like it or not. It could so happen that products made from aspartame are different such as the taste or texture of the product and the customers preferred products made from sugar and so, the manager must align his decisions with the customers preference.
Without further proof, the manager must hold his decision to implement the replacement in all the branches in the country as the assumptions made are flawed and its implementation would cause a higher economic loss or loss of customers which would be undesirable.
Essay evaluation report
Also need to argue:
we should extend this change to all the branches of Honey Bun bakeries in the rest of the country.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1590 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.831 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the manager must also consider alternate explanations which could prove his state...
^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ts wrong. First of all, the manager hasnt stated the cause of the replacement of ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... the replacement should not be advised. Similarly the health effects of aspartame with co...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... people noticed the change and the rest didnt notice the change or were hesitant to c...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ve no problem with the replacement. Thus a survey of people must be conducted to...
^^^^
Line 7, column 397, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...nager must align his decisions with the customers preference. Without further proof, t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91540785498 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63382084774 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450151057402 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6866347114 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6875 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209062540681 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770393155485 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636816473107 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115995958716 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587887142935 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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