While the author argument may seem persuasive, it is not clear how the investigation was carried out through the twenty years on the residents of Mentia city, which cannot make a cogent case unless it can provide reliable answers for some questions.
First, to validate the correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported, we need to ask if there are no other factors which may affect the people's health in twenty years. Many factors may affect people's tendency to have a headache. For example, people in the city may have adopted a healthier lifestyle through these years, or it might be more peaceful in the city. The author should prove a concrete connection between the two incidents, the correlation does not necessarily reflect causation.
Second, the author built his bold assumption on the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates, which exists on the food. At the same time, he did not state what is the amount of the salicylates in the food which make it efficiently reduce a headache. So, he should state how much salicylates exist in the food which the residents of Mentia consumed? Is the portion of salicylates effective to reduce a headache occurrence? Moreover, How much did the decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants?. All these questions can determine if the author can attain proper and logical statement. For instance, maybe the residents did not consume effective portions of salicylates to consider its effects on them, or maybe the study participant did not consume salicylates at all.
Finally, the author did not mention the data collection strategy of the number of headaches reported. Also, he stated that there are study participants, was there a survey or interviews? and was the sample representative of the residents?. The data should be reliable and representative to be used effectively. The study participants may be not enough to build a conclusion on their case, or the survey might guide them to answer in a specific way. Unfortunately, the author did not submit enough information about the research method to prove their validity.
It might be true that there is a possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates, but the author hardly provides enough information to support his argument.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
we may argue like:
suppose it can cure headache, but it doesn't mean it can prevent its happening.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1934 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.01 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.335 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...e no other factors which may affect the peoples health in twenty years. Many factors ma...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...uce a headache. So, he should state how much salicylates exist in the food which the...
^^^^
Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ants, was there a survey or interviews? and was the sample representative of the re...
^^^
Line 7, column 431, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a specific way" with adverb for "specific"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...r the survey might guide them to answer in a specific way. Unfortunately, the author did not subm...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h information to support his argument.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15803108808 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95747487367 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492227979275 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7080896144 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.789473684 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215959467366 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652209678425 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582993434088 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114110643529 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637233930391 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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