The argument suggests that with the use of the salicylates as flavor additives for foods, the residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future, which is based on the premise that salicylates could be a surrogate of aspirin with a significant effects on reducing headaches according to a twenty-year study. It may seems plausible and appealing at the first glimpse, however, without further investigation on certain aspects, the argument is still remain doubtful and dubious.
Firstly, examining whether the drug has the negative side effects is of great importance in order to make sure of the medicine safety. As many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, adding the drugs to the foods as preservatives may lead to the result of overdose. These is a strong possibility that negative side effects will emergence while the gradient of the drugs grows higher, thus the safety of the drugs should be well-examined before we accept the argument.
Secondly, the correlation of salicylates and a decline in the average number of headaches is ungrounded unless details are provided. With no awareness of the mechanism of the drugs, the empirical results of the study are unsounded. We can imagine that the participants may take up healthier lifestyle after being caught by headaches during the twenty years, as a result, the number of their reports of headaches will certainly decrease, thus nullify our extrapolation that it is the drug which ameliorate the headaches. Moreover, the number of participants and whether they were randomly chosen should also be provided in the results for giving a more convincing argument.
At last, it is not guaranteed that the patients who suffer from the headaches will take the food with the medicine adding to it. They may not be aware of the news that the companies are doing so aiming to reduce headaches or they may disgust and disincline the taste of food for personal reasons. Accordingly, the actions of adding salicylates as flavor additives may end up with failure or with trivial effects.
To sum up, with my cogently analysis, the argument that the rate of headaches will significantly reduced is untenable until further questions are answered.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 2. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1808 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.022 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.095 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...surrogate of aspirin with a significant effects on reducing headaches according to a tw...
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Line 1, column 460, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'remained'.
Suggestion: remained
... certain aspects, the argument is still remain doubtful and dubious. Firstly, exami...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[4]
Message: Did you mean 'this'?
Suggestion: This
...ves may lead to the result of overdose. These is a strong possibility that negative s...
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Line 9, column 98, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...he rate of headaches will significantly reduced is untenable until further questions ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15833333333 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87362285858 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8219047465 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.846153846 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6923076923 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 5.70786347227 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168183536483 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558311393422 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588672162749 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886833987345 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629372584383 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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