Apart from delivering knowledge to students, a teacher should also devote in building students' sense of responsibility, and guiding them to choose their suitable careers. And it is important that the teacher should make academic progress as well. Above all, a teacher's salary should be fully and meticulously determined with the consideration of all of these aspects. Thus considering the role of teacher merely as cultivating students with outstanding academic performance, the suggestion that teachers' salaries should be based on their students' performance is untenable.
The subjects and methods in evaluating the academic performance should be reconsidered in this argument. Firstly, a teacher's academic progress is of the same importance of a student's performance. It is unreasonable for one who is insufficient in knowledge to teacher others, thus the salary should be based on both the teacher's and students' performance. Secondly, the general method of evaluation is having tests, which is a deviation from the kernel. Students with high test scores could not be guaranteed to be a good scholar in the future, rather they may merely be the ones who are capable of reciting text books. In all, the salary should be determined by academic performance is untenable.
Apart from cultivating students with exceptional academic performance, the teachers are playing their roles in planning students' future and building their social responsibility. The purpose of education is not merely about delivering knowledge, but also expecting the youth to make a better future society by retaining and using the knowledge. The term "egoist" is used to describe someone who only consider oneself and give no attention to others. With the society replete with such egoists, a country could not be operating. The situation is similar to a oak tree is no longer growing with parasites sucking its sap. Thus, a teacher should take the responsibility to guide and educate students to be a altruistic and useful person.
With the consideration of such roles, it is parochial to say that the teachers' salaries should be based on their students' performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...academic progress as well. Above all, a teachers salary should be fully and meticulously...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a teacher' or simply 'teachers'?
Suggestion: a teacher; teachers
...reconsidered in this argument. Firstly, a teachers academic progress is of the same import...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...progress is of the same importance of a students performance. It is unreasonable for one...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... operating. The situation is similar to a oak tree is no longer growing with para...
^
Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ity to guide and educate students to be a altruistic and useful person. With ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39053254438 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14228483642 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479289940828 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2981681604 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.176470588 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.557315261212 0.243740707755 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185369347339 0.0831039109588 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133221809057 0.0758088955206 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.378721376899 0.150359130593 252% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615922805995 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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