A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
On the basis of twenty-year study on headaches on resident of Mentia concluded that Salicylates has therapeutic effect on headache. The food-processing companies also found that Salicylate naturally rich in foods and I can be used for preservation of food products as well as it can also use flavor additives for foods. The experts predict that the Salicylate is effective and with its use the headache of Mentia’s residents will fewer in future. There are so many questions would be answered by researcher before jumping to the conclusion.
First of all, the researcher found Salicylate a powerful medicine for headache and it is related to aspirin’s chemical family. In the given argument the author is talking about the positive effects of medicine but what about its side effects? As I had read about side effects of aspirin on memory in different researches so there is a strong possibility that the Salicylate also trace some side effect on body in such a long time period of twenty years. This is one of the weak points of the argument.
Secondly, the food-processing companies already used Salicylate as preservative and now they found that it can be used as flavor in food. There is no sign of over dose of Salicylate in the passage. The food-processing company explained that Salicylate chemical is naturally found in food and it is healthy, but my concern is the artificial sugar saccharin is very harmful for us than how we can rely on artificial form of Salicylate. We all know that the vitamin C present in citric fruits like lemon, orange, mango so on, and it is beneficial for our body but if we take citric acid than our body get harmed. On the basis of such researches we cannot assume that a particular chemical help us to cure.
Thirdly, there are different reasons for headache such as stress, lack of sleep, work load, flew, cough and cold, migraine and so on. For every reason the treatment should be decided. The researcher had not explained about the particular type of headache the Salicylate id beneficial. The data is not enough to close any fruitful result. However the researcher got the positive results on the selected population but we cannot generalize the results without proper information.
Finally, the aforementioned reasons the prediction of the experts is not so reasonable, more data and findings are important to reach on concert results.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 402 350
No. of Characters: 1943 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.478 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.832 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.069 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e of Mentia's residents will fewer in future. There are so many questions would be a...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dicine but what about its side effects? As I had read about side effects of aspiri...
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Line 6, column 339, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ot enough to close any fruitful result. However the researcher got the positive results...
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Line 6, column 479, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the results without proper information. Finally, the aforementioned reasons the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, such as, talking about, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97512437811 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93823954983 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512437810945 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9848688831 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.263157895 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19945965492 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066283587271 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899088701207 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102836834197 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886890784721 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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