A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
The above prompt, discuss the study about the headaches suffered by the residents of the Mentia and also investigates the effect of salicylates and how it will play in the twenty-year-old study. The author explains how salicylates, an element known to play an effective role in drugs like aspirin -- now started to be employed in the field of food-processing. The author believes that the adaption of salicylates in the food-processing industry will improve the condition of the residents of Mentia which is also backed up with different predictions made by a few health experts. That being said, in order to evaluate these assumptions the following three concerns must be addressed.
First of all, Though the author mentions vaguely about the two-year-old research study, he or she fails to back this up with enough evidence to assume its reliability. The duration of the study does not imply how efficient it is. The author fails to provide more specific insights on how this study came to the conclusion that salicylates could provide a solution to the headache condition of the Matias. Without the proper numbers and evidence, this assumption clearly weakens the author's conclusion.
Secondly, Even if the “twenty-year-old study” evaluated to be sufficient. The adaption of salicylates in food processing companies is still in their embryonic stage. For something as serious as salicylates, to make it compatible with the existing system will surely require a lot of resources, chemical engineers support and not to forget time. To consider this assumption could make the situation of Mentia -- does not hold water.
Finally, About the predictions of the “Health Experts” do not provide us with any details on how they came to this conclusion. Apart from all this, this argument still leaves us with many unanswered questions like the credibility of these experts, the data of the study, if the participants had any medical previous records related to headaches and any details on the side effects of salicylates.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, considerably flawed due to its several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide the three pieces of evidence stated above and perhaps conduct a systematic research study, then it will be possible to determine if salicylates provide a better solution for the residents of Mentia.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ployed in the field of food-processing. The author believes that the adaption of sa...
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ce, this assumption clearly weakens the authors conclusion. Secondly, Even if the &...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, apart from, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13427210562 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534210526316 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2039641832 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.875 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173112315985 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056690310806 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675568346512 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941001623425 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054543134617 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.095 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.934 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.238 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5