As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
One of the perks of being a millennial is to have access to a great amount of Knowledge. In this era of high-speed communication, we have everything in our finger-tips. But every now and then this leads us to think if it’s really a blessing or a curse. The prompt states a theory that the more knowledge we gain, the more complex and mysterious our thoughts become. I strongly agree that “too much of anything is good for nothing”, The following arguments will support this theory.
For starters, the abundance of knowledge makes us question everything. It allows us to over think and restrict us from doing something. For instance, Think of a talented musician, Though he’s very talented, he always questions art. He worries about the things like whether his mixing are on point is the guitars been tuned perfectly tuned or that slight “Hiss” (Background noise) in his recording affects the entire song. Instead of worrying about things like this, he should have put his art out for the public to get inspired by his work. The only thing which restricted him from doing so is the abundance of knowledge which made things more complex and mysterious.
Not to forget, The abundance of knowledge could also limit us to a confined intellectual space to an extent we become its slave. The greatest gift of Humans is their “Sixth Sense”, The one which is responsible for our innovative thinking. When star trek portrayed a communication device that looked like “Flip Phone”, people thought it was absurd to even think something like that would come to existence. Fast forward 10 years, it came in existence and went out of fashion so soon by something even better and far more reach. To make the impossible you may have to think “out-of-the-box” but while being a slave to knowledge will restrict you from doing so. It is ironic that the very same thing that knowledge aims to do is hindered by itself. Imagine if Steve Jobs was restricted to means of the rules and technology of that day we would never have smartphones today.
Of course, some could argue that “Knowledge makes us superior” I would agree to them as long as we consume the knowledge, not when knowledge consumes us. Balance is essential, Just like everything even knowledge should be taken in correct proportion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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One of the perks of being a millennial is to have access to a great amount of ...
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...have everything in our finger-tips. But every now and then this leads us to think if it's rea...
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Suggestion:
...hould be taken in correct proportion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, really, so, then, while, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99491094148 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06551681031 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564885496183 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7209133921 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.15 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.65 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175505011251 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572894308288 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900939759055 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109071705923 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478486782839 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.