As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
This argument assert that obtaining of more knowledge only makes things more complex and mysterious. It is true that we are living in a vast and complex world, but it is a word that is being readily understood with each new advancement and breakthrough. I disagree with the statement, and believe that people will gain a deeper understanding of the world as they mentally process more of its hidden mechanics and secrets.
Admittedly, the amount of information and date we encounter daily can make things confusing. We are living in a day with so many data are fleeting around the internet. For example, when we want the search for certain topic, we can encounter so much useless and unrelated information to intrigue people, such as advertising banners or the data with making money purpose. This consequently leads time consuming by not gaining so much useful information what people want first. This also happens for student, when more data we generate more people or student need to learn new things even though student already have burden of study.
However, knowledge has brought us to solve past problem much more efficiently. In the past, crime scene for example, it was hard to find out the criminal and they keep the works as unsolved crime. But, obtain new method and technology such as finger print, DNA sequences and CCTV can helps to find out criminal much more easier than before. Moreover, they can also solve past unsolved problem with high-tech and new knowledge, it is clearly evident that, this accumulated knowledge has helps people to solved intricate problems
In addition, acquiring more knowledge can help make more innovative works, Wright Brothers for example, they invented the first plane that people were able to understand the method of flight and this works leads now a days innovative air-crafts, such as drones. This kind of ideas also lead huge changes of life by connecting the world more easily. Moreover, these day, IT era, we are live with enormous amount of data, so called Big Data, this data help us to develop Artificial Intelligent that has more accurate decision making than human does. Therefore, these kind of innovating works are based on gaining knowledge.
To sum, some people think that the world is really confusing because of the bunch of information are fleeting around us. However, this kind of data we acquire in daily life can help us more than the past so I make a clear position that acquiring new and more knowledge is not making people confuse but they can solve more difficult tasks easier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
This argument assert that obtaining of more knowledge only m...
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Line 9, column 317, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...CTV can helps to find out criminal much more easier than before. Moreover, they can also so...
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Line 13, column 213, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...e method of flight and this works leads now a days innovative air-crafts, such as drones. ...
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Line 13, column 217, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...thod of flight and this works leads now a days innovative air-crafts, such as drones. ...
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Line 13, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
...ecting the world more easily. Moreover, these day, IT era, we are live with enormous amou...
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Line 13, column 560, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...sion making than human does. Therefore, these kind of innovating works are based on gainin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96983758701 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53413982527 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501160092807 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.6171736189 60.3974514979 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3529411765 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298499241015 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108417398607 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103119144315 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19560165371 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684587354918 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.